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A Christmas Triolet Hymn

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~by Gregg Rowe~


Angels we have heard on high
O’er mountain tops, trumpets blow
Above the clouds in His sky
Angels we have heard on high
Peace on earth is the reply
Light of Beth, my Heaven's glow
Angels we have heard on high
O’er mountain tops, trumpets blow

Angel voices sing out strong
Gloria inexcelsis
Bended knee, I join their song
Angel voices sing out strong
Spirit taken -- where I long
Power in His Glory’s kiss
Angel voices sing out strong
Gloria inexcelsis



Author notes

Text:   French Carol ; translation by James Chadwick (1813-1882)
Music: GLORIA §7136 - French carol arrangement by Rev. S.S. Greatheed

Angels We have Heard On High

christmassongbook.net/s7136c.asp


Written December 20th, 2005

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  • Frogzter gold member
    December 9, 2006

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    A beautiful entry and addition to this contest! Thanks for sharing it and best wishes in the contest!
    Frog~


  • Melissa Powell
    December 8, 2006
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    Beautiful!

    Your entry was perfect for the season...the reason we celebrate!


  • Frozentearz
    December 5, 2006
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    Thank you for sharing within our contest
    some beautiful words play out within this.
    Blessings to you this holiday season
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • VampireShadow
    November 30, 2006

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    This was awesome. It had an amazing flow to it, and made me feel kinda like singing out loud with the words you chose. It made me long for Christmas even more, lol. The repetitiveness of this piece really complemented it, gave it that sing-song feel. heh, I love the background too I also appreciate the fact that it is not overly long, instead short and simple and inspiring as a Christmas song/poem is supposed to be. Anyway thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!!

    <333 Jess


    • lordoftherings gold member
      November 30, 2006
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      I Was Kind Of Shy

      After I viewed your pen name I was kind of shy that maybe I had entered the wrong contest. Thanks so much for enjoying it and reading it as it was written -- a hymn.

      Gregg

      • VampireShadow
        November 30, 2006
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        Don't be shy ^.^

        I don't bite, I swear! No need to be shy, lol, I'm a very nice/happyish type of person, despite my pen name. You're welcom, and thank you for entering.


  • Josy2
    January 28, 2006
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    It's a good way to write a triolet.

  • lordoftherings gold member
    December 23, 2005
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    Hi John & Susan: Happy Holdiays to you and your family!

    I tried so hard to open the second stanza of the triolet with the request of your rules, but I really wanted to end the hymn on the Gloria excelsis line--every line is a seven syllable line to give the musical flow of the hymn--and if I had opened the second stanza I would have an overuse of a line and it really spoiled the song, so I switched it to the second line instead.

    Because of this editorial decision on my write, I will withdraw from the contest since it is my decision, yet at the same time, I did need to showcase this write. I know that rules are rules so I am not at all disappointed, actually proud that I could still write one of these without it being obvious that I was relying on five lines being repetitious and proud that it didn't swallow into the meaning of the poem.

    Gregg
    Edited on Jan 28, 4:02 p.m. because ''.


  • SusanL
    December 23, 2005
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    this is very lovely and I hate to be picky, but John is right the rules specifically said the first line of the poem ahs to come from the song.
    You really did a great job with this.
    Susan


  • J Rhys Davies
    December 23, 2005
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    Gregg, I have read many of your works in the past and for some unknown reason, I had neglected to keep that up. After reading this, I will need to make it a point to remedy that. The only thing I need to point out in this is in the second triolet, The first line of it needs to be from the song. Yours is in the second line. Or am I missing something? No matter, it was still a brilliant write.

    ~ John


  • Loveboots
    December 22, 2005
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    festive!

    Merry Christmas! Your poem has certainly caught the feel of Christmas carols and all things angelic.
    I ave no idea what the form is for Triolet, but I guess it is to do with repeating certain lines? The repetition you use here gives that feel of carolly Christmas songs sung round candle lit churches. It's very festive.
    God luck for the contest!
    LB


  • Bache 77
    December 22, 2005
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    My knowledge on the type of poetry is actually quite limited, so I won't b4oth4er with a technic4al4 critique. From someone still learning, I found i4t to be very tight whatever form, and the words stunning creati4g a beautiful hym! Best of luck to you


  • Prince Charming
    December 22, 2005
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    Just a few days before christmas I am just like so many others busy preparing for this feast. Reading your write brought me back to the basics of the feast, a fantastic reminder for me in those busy days. I wish you a merry christmas and thank you for sharing this fantastic hymn and wish you the best of luck in this contest Herman


  • Luciferschild
    December 22, 2005
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    is this original or is this a hymn, im having trouble deciding which, either way it was nice reading it


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    I just love this style and form of poetry, and what a well done job you've done here Greg, thanks for sharing, Merry Christmas!

    -Timothy~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

  • Holly Ritz
    December 21, 2005
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    woah! this was really cool. I loved how you incorperated the song into the poem, and the words you've chosen link every line to the next one. This is good work!! good luck in the contest and have a happy holiday and a great new year!

    *~~*Holly


  • Rock-Out-Loud
    December 21, 2005
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    Very Christmasy, loved it, very nice, and well done!

    Happy Christmas!
    Merry Christmas!
    Seasons Greetings!
    Happy Holidyas!
    So on and So forth..Lol Have a happy new year tooo

  • Aster67
    December 21, 2005
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    Enspiring

    I've been kind of glooming the past few days because I've been sick but that poem got me in the Christmas Spirit

    Happy Holidays!!

  • blueeyestexas
    December 21, 2005
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    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!!

    Merry Christmas!

    Kelly


  • spamwitch
    December 21, 2005
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    My knowledge on the type of poetry is actually quite limited, so I won't bother with a technical critique. From someone still learning, I found it to be very tight whatever form, and the words stunning creating a beautiful hym! Best of luck to you!


  • CountryCousin
    December 21, 2005
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    A joy to read.

    I agree this is splendid and I think this would indeed be a hit. You did well with this song and frankly it was a pure joy to read.

  • Frost Bit Rose
    December 21, 2005
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    This is very very beautiful!!!!!!!


  • Hinemoa silver member
    December 21, 2005
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    Dear Gregg, Great Hymn you have written. It's nice to see you posting again, I will be back to see if you have written anything else, take care sweety and have a very Happy Christmas.
    Love Sally.


  • ebaby
    December 21, 2005
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    aah yeah it could here this is my head, I love the photo, very good hymm....... Merry Christmas!

  • Vera Rich
    December 20, 2005
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    This is splendid - to see someone using a classic form as a stanza... (I was already thinking of displaying a triolet Christmas greeting - which I wrote for our Christmas cards some years ago, and which of course has been published since - but am now a little reluctant to do so, as you might feel I had 'lifted' your idea...)

    The one thing that worries me about your poem is 'Light of Beth'... Is this meant as an abbreviation for Bethlehem? My knowledge of Hebrew is very weak - but as I understand it, 'Beth' (or modern Hebrew - Beit) means simply 'House'...

    Apart from that quibble... congratulations... and carry on with the good work!

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