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Lovers Concerto (A Kyrielle)

Shhh… listen tell me do you hear
the falling of a single tear.
Inside two hearts it will echo
words of the lovers concerto.

From the depths of within it pours
touching souls which are mine and yours.
Because only true love can know
words of the lovers concerto.

A soft sweet whisper of the wind
speaks of a love the stars destined.
As a gentle breeze starts to blow
words of the lovers concerto.

How melodically that voice sings
with the laughter and joy love brings.
Comforting in the times of woe
words of the lovers concerto.

A verse we will never erase
for it plays each time we embrace.
From one heart to one heart they flow
words of the lovers concerto.

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Written May 10th, 2004

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  • The Poetic Angel
    May 27, 2008
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    this is butiful

    x cheeky x


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    May 27, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry

    Lovely imagery, nice use of metaphor and personification. I love the refrain line as well. Unfortunately this did not fit the contest prompt of Pain.

    The form was done very well, with a good complex rhyme scheme which gave a good rhythm. Kind of like a dance to that lover's concerto.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • lovelustre
    July 12, 2006
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    lovely, romantic


  • ecnamor
    February 17, 2006
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    WONDERFUL! wow i really loved this. it is well done, well written, beautiful flow, rhythm and rhyme...This was well worth my time and if i had any applauses i would applaud you but sorry my dear I believe I don't. I especially liked these lines;;
    A soft sweet whisper of the wind
    speaks of a love the stars destined.
    As a gentle breeze starts to blow
    words of the lovers concerto.

    How melodically that voice sings
    with the laughter and joy love brings.
    Comforting in the times of woe
    words of the lovers concerto.

    they were very strong and kept me wanting more. Please, do write more like this i will continue to read, dear.
    lovely job.
    <33ren

  • Levity
    February 17, 2006
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    Outstanding

    Very well done in a very difficult form. Pulling down a rhythm and rhyme as well as you did this one speaks for effort. You must have invested a lot of time and rewriting into this. Your intentions are clear, nothing is forced, and this is a beutiful piece of hard work. Congratulations.


  • StrangerInThisWorld
    February 11, 2006
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    This is a great type of poetry. Your structured flawless and your vocabulary and topic were great. Thank you for entering my contest!

  • LyricalHeritage
    January 12, 2006
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    Spectacular. My favorite stanza was
    "A soft sweet whisper of the wind
    speaks of a love the stars destined.
    As a gentle breeze starts to blow
    words of the lovers concerto."
    I'm glad you commented on my poem because through that I was able to see your work. Great job and best wishes.


  • Whispered Devotions
    January 3, 2006
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    I dont know what to say.. this was beautiful. such a unique take on love. Amazing.. remarkable.. spectacular job. I am speechless.. this left me breathless. Thank you bunches for entering my contest and I wish you alot of luck here and many times after.


  • faderman1959
    January 2, 2006
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    This is wonderful! I think it is my favorite of yours I have read so far! You did a wonderful job with this. Great write!


  • AKM Takayuki
    December 28, 2005
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    such a soft and gentle peice, I felt like if I read it too fast, it would shatter. Great job on displaying the emotion and I wish you luck in my contest!

  • Michael A
    December 27, 2005
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    Great

    I love that this whole piece is but a whisper. I am imagine this is what happens "when one heart becomes one soul."


  • the perfect flaw
    December 27, 2005
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    beautiful. it's hard to explain, but i really like the whole way you set this up. especially the whole "shh..." thing. that really set the tone for the rest of it, and it was done very well.
    good luck in the contest.

  • Eusebius
    December 26, 2005
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    Bravo!

    This is very fine indeed! The use of the repeating last line of each stanza creates a marvelous poetic, hypnotic mood. Just plain excellent poetry. Wonderful and superb! A double Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!


  • April Renee
    December 25, 2005
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    very nice. good job with writing this. enjoyed.

    blu

  • philosophilm
    December 24, 2005
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    haha really good piece. it almost seems like a song, with that constant concerto motif, prancing and flowing along. good work!

  • Vampiric Fox Demon
    December 21, 2005
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    Beautiful. The emotion and flow was wonderful. I love the rhyming, very nice. The meaning is grand and the repetion of 'words of the lovers concerto' really add to the effect.


  • Bones
    December 21, 2005
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    Very, very expressive. It's a very sweet and beautiful write. I throughly enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work.

  • leos-gurl143
    December 19, 2005
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    beautiful!! absolutly wonderfull and truly vivid! this was a great write and I hope to read more from you soon. Happy Holidays@@
    Peace
    Molly


  • TJCasser
    December 19, 2005
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    A subject that's often written about but never truly covered too fully if you ask my opinion. I'm curious as to what a 'Kyrielle' is, so if you'd be so kind as to illuminate... but overall, very well written.


  • Alicia-Nicole
    December 19, 2005
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    Awh, I loved it! You brillaintly made the comparison between music and love. And it got me thinking about how it really IS like a concerto. Powerful, strong, beautiful, yet soft, tender, sweet... Your poem invokes thought, and the rhyming doesn't take away from the meaning, but rather adds to it gracefully! Excelently done! You're a genius.

    ~Alicia~


  • Pollywog
    December 19, 2005
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    oh... wow... this is amazing... this is so beautiful... just so wonderfully written... amazing... just sensational... no more words can describe this piece... Keep up the good work...
    ~:Kitten:~


  • Black Suicide
    December 19, 2005
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    How wonderful and beautiful. I loved how you used much more 'unusual' words. They make the poem that much more elegant and great to read. It's all wonderful, thanks for sharing!
    Nikki


  • Kwame
    December 19, 2005
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    excellent!!

    great job!!!this is reallyu beautiful!!i really enjoyed reading this...i love it period!!!!great job!!!!this is just outstanding!!

  • Freakazoidsarah
    December 19, 2005
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    How beautiful...I like to think that when you love someone the tunes of your hearts are in harmony, and your poem shows that so well!!


  • December 19, 2005
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    This is so beautifully written. A wonderful idea to use "lovers concerto." THe flow and rhyme make this poem read so easily. Thank you for sharing. It is a very good poem.

  • spookypoptart
    December 18, 2005
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    good job, i think that this was a very good job, good write


  • AbeLLa5291
    December 18, 2005
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    very well written... great poem..enjoyed reading it. thanks for sharing
    -Kate

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