There's too much pain involved in the sight of you
I cry as rain and it's all I ever do
I've lost sight of my future and my ways
And in my dreams I'm counting my days
But you showed me how good life can be
And how much I have to lose
You showed me I'm worth more, and I see
I am free to choose
Life
My love for you has always been great
And you knew you loved me less though you tried
But what matters was never your love or its weight
For mine never wavered in its stride
And I wish you happiness and smiles
Although this could never be with me
I wish you have all those wonderful whiles
For which we never found the key
And you showed me how good life can be
And how much I have to lose
You showed me I'm worth more, and I see
I am free to choose
Life
Author notes
Not sure it's finished, so... yeah.
I know it's very mainstream to write about love, but I'm trying to get over a breakup with a man I love very much. It's been very hard on me, partly because I was already having trouble with a depression which has lasted for more than a year...
Written December 18th, 2005
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A contest entry
- A very broad Contest by Not-The-Sun.
350 points, ended June 3, 2006, 29 entries
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i like this write it flows nicely and the rhyming is great. Good luck in my contest *Jordan**
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Nice job. I like that your poem flows so well. It makes it easy to read. Obviously something happened between you and who you are writing about. Don't worry though, soon you'll be able to look at them without feeling pain.
~John -
Wow, what a good poem. I hate breakups, they're so hard to get over. I think you did a good job on this poem, and I hope all gets well soon. Good luck in this contest!!
Take Care,
x PatientGrace x
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Thank you.
I am slowly getting over it, he's already getting into a new relationship, and continues to abuse the love I feel for him. Still, I wish for him that he be happy, for then my depression did not ruin us both. -
This is really good, and I know getting over a breakup, is very heart breaking, and hard to overcome. This holds a lot of emotion, and something that everyone can relate to. Thanks for entering, and good job.
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