Black dresses flood the cemetery
And all has fallen down
In this cliché tragedy
My mistakes let you down
Another night, again I'd die for you
My only one, my beloved
there's just no one who gets me like you do
And you still won't leave me alone
My dreams are infected
With words you used to say
And you can't understand
That I never, ever, ever felt this way
Another night, again I'd die for you
My only one, my beloved
there's just no one who gets me like you do
And you still won't leave me alone
for some unknown reason,
our status will remain as friends
Broken this fragile thing now
in this Bonnie and Clyde kind of romance
Another night, again I'd die for you
My only one, my beloved
there's just no one who gets me like you do
And you still won't leave me alone
Black dresses flood the cemetery
And all has fallen down
In this cliché tragedy
My mistakes let you down
Author notes
"banana phone"
Artist Used (song): Smile Empty Soul (who I am), Yellowcard (Only One), The Spill Canvas (Black Dresses)(The Tide)(Secret Oath)(All Hail The Heartbreaker), Evanescence (My Immortal)
Lyrics edited: 'he' was changed to 'you' in the line 'And you can't understand' because otherwise it didn't make sense, sorry about this and i hope my entry is still acceptable :S
*this tells the story of a girl who really likes a guy so much she would die for him and no one could mean as much to her as he does but for an unknown reason they'll never be more than friends and all she ever does is seem to let him down with her mistakes.*
Written December 18th, 2005
A contest entry
- this could be interesting.... by Smuh Akers.
812 points, ended January 14, 2006, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very good.
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this is really good i thnk you did really well in not just using lines straight out of the songs you actually chose small parts and put them into new lines, if you get me! ... i LOVE the first stanza how it rhymes as well, really good job with that. I also really like "for some unknown reason,
our status will remain as friends
Broken this fragile thing now
in this Bonnie and Clyde kind of romance" - nice choice of lyrics. i really think this is great and i love the way you have repeated parts. thanks so much for entering
x dwy x -
Wow awesome job....I really enjoyed reading this! Good Luck in the contest! !!!
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