Dearest man your pain engulfs me
The mood you sense haunts me
Your eyes follow me
Though you are not here.
I’d be sad for you – but I’m not
I don’t know that I should be
But you send me thoughts of sadness.
Should I respond?
Dearest man you are a stranger to me now
Yet I am meeting with you in my dreams.
Are your powers so strong
Or are mine so weak that I cannot resist?
Why do you make me sad?
Why do I wake briefly beside you?
Do you see me – can you feel me?
I feel you in the night
And I see you in my bed
I hear your voice echo in my head.
Yet your lips are silent
You cannot reach me by pen.
Are thoughts all we have left?
For I have build walls between us
We have grown apart
No physical bonds anymore – but can we burn the bonds of thought?
Can we disconnect telepathy?
Will we ever truly want to?
You cannot hurt with me as I have hurt so badly on my own.
You cannot relate to my pain because you inflicted it.
Yet you appear to me
Do you mean to
Or am I bringing you to me?
I no longer want you
I no longer need you
I no longer know you
But you are there, you are here, you are everywhere.
If I close my doors I get curious
When I open them I get furious
Yet I feel nothing for you
Want nothing from you
Am I convincing myself?
When I sleep, I sleep deep
When I think, I think deeply
Author notes
This is not an easily understandable read...
At the time of writing this, I had a very strange connection to the secondary character. We would visit each other in dreams and converse - we would discuss what we had "chatted" about when we would next meet - yes, strange but true. All of us have this capability, some are more open to it than others (whacky but true). However, I digress... This is expressing his frequent attempts to "communicate" with me after we had parted...
Thank God I am older now and my "gift" seems to be either gone or under control, ha ha.
Written October 24th, 1991
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A sad write, one in which you share the pain you feel with the readers - painful thoughts are sometimes harder to deal with than physical pain. Well written poem you have penned.
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Well...that's a deep subject. This is strange to say the least. I guess the title pulls it all together, but who is the aberration that you speak of and do you know them or are they haunting you for some reason? I was left with many questions. This reads well but I'm not sure where it was taking me! Sad story though! Thanks for your visit and comment on my work. the Shaker
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Your writes show so much depth and emotion. You take us to the place in which your words read. You make us feel the hurt and pain that are behind your pen. Keep em coming.
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your way >>>>>> Sandy *rose San-d
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Excellent
I have no idea in what concept this was devised, but it held my attention to the last word with it's pathos..To need and not need, is something that many of us are familiar with. Excellent write
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some excellent work, words well chosen to depict the feelings of a victim of spousal abuse...we may hate the man, but do we ever hate the man for the physical abuse or for teh mental and emotional abuse? Love is not always a forgiving thing, sometimes it lingers into the deepest darkest night... ...but we shall go forward and preach the rewards for those strong enough to survive..in all areas freda
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*I like the line "Burn the bonds of thoughts."
*deep should be 'deeply' at the end
*build should be built
*if you copy this into a word-processor and then ruthlessly cut every word you don't ABSOLUTELY NEED, you might find something you like. I know not everyone edits like that, but it's a trick I've been taught, and I find it works well for me, so I pass it on.
Edited on Jan 04, 11:11 p.m. because 'in spite of my arrogance, I cannot spell'. -
Deep, dark, creepy but all in all thoroughly enjoyable, excellent work my friend! I loved it.
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This is very deep and heart felt and I thoroughly enjoyed it- but sadly it is not a sonnet and this is a sonnet contest
... I'm sorry! Why don't you remove it from this contest and try another one?
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I usually tend to get bored with posts this lengthy, but I have to admit you kept my interest the whole way through. I think you have a solid message going on within your lines. Nicely done.
Keep penning and welcome to AP!
~ John
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awsome job, I love all the work of yours I have read so far!
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