Some things bright and beautiful,
But only if they're small,
Some things wise and wonderful:
This poems ignores them all.
Each electronic door that opens,
Each Christmas card that sings,
He loves their gaudy colors,
He loves electronic things
The baby's in his high-chair,
The food upon his plate,
He drops stuff on the carpet,
A right old mess he makes.
The purple coated smarties,
The cholesterol running high,
The e-numbers in their recipe
That makes him think he'll fly.
The short days in the winter,
The pleasant flakes of snow
The snowmen in the garden,
Make his face to smile and glow.
Those tiny toasted soldiers,
The places where we play,
The puddles caused by "water",
Mum moped up where he lay.
Those tiny eyes to see with,
Those small lips used to yell
How good it is being tiny,
But I'd like to grow as well.
Author notes
See and hear the original here but when you've finished turn the lights off, and carry me home.
www.cyberhymnal.org/htm/a/l/allthing.htm
commented on A Christmas Pageant
Written December 15th, 2005
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Just plain sweet ...
Your description was lovely ... and Oh to be be small again! Your poem flowed right along and it would be perfect for a contest that is on the list now. Sorry I can't say which one as it has slipped my memory but it was something about 'through the eyes of a child? Maybe ... If I remember correctly? it accepted prewrites. joy
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Welcome back Joy.
I really must leave Oldpoetry alone for a while and return the favour by reading more of your stuff.
This started of as a Christmas competition poem a couple of winters ago. Another thing I must do one day is adjust this to fit it more exactly to the tune. "All things bright.... " It might be nice to sing it next Christmas.
Jim
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Thanks for reading and writing.
Jim S -
This is a really sweet poem. It made me think about how we appreciate the simple thins in life when we're little, then it is so easy to be satisfied and intrigued.
This is a wonderful poem, thanks for sharing -
Thank you P
Jim S -
This poem is so cute...
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you are welcome
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I hate to say it but I had forgotten I put in that line for a twist ending.
My apologies I can now see where you wer coming from so to speak.
Thanks for both your comments
Jim S -
the last stanza made me think of growth
Those tiny eyes to see with,
Those small lips used to yell
How good it is being tiny,
But I'd like to grow as well
once again, excuse me, i am only but a pup in life, so now that you pointed out the obvious, i can clearly see small things in life was cearly what you meant...i just tend to draw hasty conclusions, a sign of my teenage years I'm sure..still a very well written piece of work -
All of what you have written may or may not be true but what has it got to do with the poem which is about small things and not growth?
Jim S -
truly growth is a crucial factor to achieve in life..but conflicting emotions of wanting to stay as you are is in combat with maturity...there is a huge age-gap between the two of us...i am a pup of only seventeen, but i believe poetry is the method through which people of all ages and cultures can familiarize with each other. great piece of work
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Hi Evergreen. Thanks for your kind words.
Just to explain the opening. You need to cpmpare with the words of the original hymn. All things bright and beautiful.
My version had to be slightly different hence I made some changes (small ones of course
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I'm not sure if it could be ssung to exactly the same tune but close enough to have fun with I think.
Anyway thanks for reading and writing.
Jim S -
Lovely poem! the details were great, and the poem had a very comforting and warm effect; the messes he makes, the cute things he likes and such.
i didn't quite understand the first stanza however. especially:
"Some things wise and wonderful:
This poems ignores them all."
this poem doesn't ignore what's wonderful; this young child is wonderful.
but great poem anyways, and thanks so much for entering! -
Once again thanks for your generouse applause Shahrzad. I am glad you liked my effort which you probably realised was built around the old hymn -All Things Bright and Beautiful- I hope the organisers are as pleased.
Happy reading.
Jim S -
This is a wonderful lovely poem.
I really enjoy reading your poems.
Shahrzad
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