You watch peoples' lives go past
You watch them die and be born
It seems that time is so fast
Goes from night, then to the dawn
You see clouds washing the earth
You see them as they pour rain
No one knows what gold is worth
Can't see; there's nothing to gain
You look at birds flying by
You look at them as they glide
It seems that the seas are dry
They are empty and there's no tide
You see your life in flashback
You see the sun fall and rise
This life is like a windy track
Round the bend, there's a surprise
Author notes
NO, my muse hasn't come back yet. It's still in deep dark waters, this time enjoying a cuppa coffee with a few killer whales.
I had written this poem about 3-4 months ago but somehow, Ms. Clumsy Fingers (yours truly), deleted it. Thank you, thank you. *Takes a bow*. I just found it in my backup about 20 minutes ago.
So, here it is! My dead muse's work.
As for the background, what do unicorns have to do with it? Nothing 
but I just love them.
Inspiration? Well, look around this world. You would've come up with this too but my ex-muse was smarter.
Ooooh...one last thing from this blabbermouth. Is there any special way to save oneself from Chilblains?
Written December 14th, 2005
What did you think
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Nav, this is an excellent piece of poetry, from any angle you may look at it... it has a lovely subject matter... you've chosen the most difficult rhyming scheme; abab, cdcd and so on...and it flows well without glitches... wish I could applause this more than once... you never fail to amaze me with your talent... Nav, keep it up with your good work...
mina
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You're welcome.
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thankyou for your entry
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Did you just take Hajmola before commenting here?
Your huge BURP sound is still echoing. And whenever you find your English textbook...just gimme the poem! 
By the way, I spoiled your chocos that you gave to Joyce. HA!!!
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3 Stars ***
"... mei albeli, bilkul akeli, koi paheli hu mei..." - dont worry i didnt sing it 
i already commented on this , so i didnt know what i should write.. humn.. arey ha.. yaad aya, i cudnt find my 11th std english text boobyaar.. warna tujhe mai woh wali poem padhata jo isse milti hai... *leaves by making huge BURP sound*
take cares and have anice time my dear friend... just keep it up..... your humble little friend.... ... 
.... .... - vic ( who else? )
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Thanks a lot for the comment and the applause.
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Thanks for the comment and the applause. Well, I'm still trying to resurrect my muse. Hopefully, it will be back soon.
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This was brilliant. There was some beautiful imagery and flowing rhyming! Well done and good luck in the contest ~Punk~
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great stuff...i really dig this!!!great rhyming and lovely imagery!!it's sad though it's an old one 'cos i'd have been happy for you if your muse were back..i'm happy anyway 'cos this is another beautiful one!!!great job!!! -
LOL! Thanks a ton for such a lovely comment, Joyce. Yeah, I did find my songs too but only after I had re-downloaded them.
By the way, I rarely have aciditiy.
Thanks again for the comment.
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Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
Nav, I'm very happy you found this one again. I like the thought behind it. We all watch as life passes by, but we also fill our lives with memories as this happens. Make those memories something to cherish when you are old. Oh yeah, that author comment about you being old! You are not even close yet, still being in your teens. Enjoy life to the fullest.
The big world is waiting for you to rock it with your ever growing mind that sees so much and says; "What can I do to change this?" Hey you found the poem, did you find the songs too. LOL Hope so!!! KK, back to the poem now. It flowed so peacefully and again I loved the thoughts it invoked.
With all those spicy foods you like your muse should be working double time to compensate for the rush that your giving it.
Another awesome write from my friend who thinks she doesn't have her muse with her, maybe it's out searching for antacids right now! 
Standing and cheering as I applaud you for this one. Love and blessings for you my friend, today and always. Joyce
Edited on Dec 15, 9:26 because 'fixing my emoticon that needed the ing taken off LOL'.
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Lol...thanks for the compliment. My author's comment is blushing with pride. Yeah, I've decided to sober down a little and turn into a retired old lady so as to write serious and simple poems. I think I had written this somewhere in September or October and then, it had got deleted along with a few of my favorite songs.
Thanks for the comment and the applause.
PSssst: Did my snowball hurt ya?
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baapre your authors comment is more interesting than your poem ...oops just kidding ....so this taken out from past hun ?...i see its lilbit different from the kinda poems you write now!...this is more of straight, simple and few metaphors but still a good one!
btw when did you write this one ?
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You don't know chilblains? Oh well, lucky you! You guys don't have a low temperature there in Madurai. Well, chilblains occur when your fingers and toes(usually, it's toes) have swellings due to excessive cold. I get them every winter. My feet never get warm and my poor little innocent toes swell every winter.
I AM thinking of some prose to try but can't really think of anything right now...no one would be be able to think if they had a Chemistry exam the day after, like I do.
Thanks for the comment.
Edited on Dec 15, 9:15 because 'I'm a loser in the spelling bee contest'.
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What is chilblains??Yeah..your dead muse was smarter..i guess your muse gave way to some prose stuff(from the author's comments)..lol..try some prose.. ..oh yeah good luck in the contest!
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Whoa! I wasn't expecting such a quick response! Thanks a lot for the lovely comment and the applause.
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You used a lot of good similes here like in the last line. Great write I love reading your poetry you're a great writer!
Hope you write more soon!
♥Kayla
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