Come with me, my love. Let me show you all that you do to me.
Place your hand upon my chest; feel my heart race, all from a
single glimpse of your face. In the dead of night my heart
speaks through whispering winds, carrying a message
of love and longing. At break of dawn my soul bows
in gratitude for the dreams of love you've inspired.
My pillow I embrace, savoring the sweet scent of
your essence that still lingers there. My fingers
dance over all the places I long for you to touch.
Your lips, I crave. They hold the only kiss that
can quench my thirst. My eyes are filled with
an over-powering hunger to ravish you. I sit
in silence thinking of you and all that you
do. In a blanket I wrap, imagining the
warmth of your loving embrace. Let
myself fade away to a special
place of everlasting love.
Drowning in a sea of
emotions I care not
to be saved from.
Visions of you
branded in
my mind, I
just can't
erase. The
sweetness
of your
kiss; blurs
my senses,
leaving me
in a spiralling haze.
My heart and soul is left
in a blazing inferno of lust, love,
passion and desire. Come to me, take me,
share with me and drink from my chalice of love.
Author notes
My favorite of my gold winners because it's my first ever piece of shape poetry that was shaped while being written and done so strictly from the image in my mind alone.
genre: love/personal
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What an absolutely exquisite write.... its total poetry to the ears and eyes.
I am not normally a fa of shape poetry but this is stunning both in the words and the form. I am in awe.
Brilliantly done
Ann -
ur a finalist!
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beautiful
good luck in the contest with this wonderful creation
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great poem, loved the form also, thanks for entering contest
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As stated below from me a truly desirable piece with great shape (excuse the pun) and texture within it. Thank you once again for sharing a beautiful heart-felt write.
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Not really a great fan of shape poetry for usually the poem takes second place to the shape. The actual writing in this actually matches the skill displayed in setting it up. It is sensual and the overall effect really clever. Well done and of all the pieces I have commented on, here is one that actually deserves some notice. Good work.
David
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Now that was cool! Thanks for this entry!
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oh, yeah ... I get the idea ...
let's see what this chalice contains : beauty, grace, devotion, passion, surrender ... and so much more ... a truly graceful piece of shape-poetry ... you can be very proud of it ...
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Yea, This is a very sensuous and shapely write.
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That's pretty... to hear and to see...
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Such a romantic and beautiful write. Also love the way you made the poem in the shape of a glass/chalice... Wonderfully written, you are very talented.
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Very Tastefully Done... Cheers !!!
You've definately poured your heart out into this one. Such poetry has runneth over with so much passion that I practically want to runneth over to experience this for myself. Wow !!!
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Beautifully formed! A sincere taste of love and the moments that we drink... Very well penned! Good luck to you in the contest!
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Firstly I would like to thank you for entering the contest!!!!!
secondly I wish you the best of luck with your creative entry!!!!!!!
Tracey!!!!!!!!!
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lets just start of by saying wow the shaping it perfect, now to the poem, it was descriptive, and that add to the imagery. For the simple fact that you shaped this your flow was actually nice, i have read a lot of shape pieces that just couldn't connect if you can understand that. The poems is very well done, it's strong and the passion gives it a second layer. Nice write and good luck
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Great work on this poem! It is so well shaped! Wow! the only poem i ever did of this sort was a star (It didn't turn out so well) Incredible anyways, that you managed to work it out so well!
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Wow. This is really cool. I loved the way you shaped it. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
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Gorgeous! How long did it take you to make it into the shape of a chalice? Quite a while, I imagine!
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OMG!
this was soo amazing!
i loved the way you put the words into a wine glass!
birlliant and beauitful piece!
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This was very sweet and precious. You've done a great job. The best of luck to you in the contest
Kari -
GOLD
Dear Celticmoon:
The judging for these writes were split in two. Tim chose the ones containing the main factors: IMPACT, PASSION CENTERED AROUND LOVE, CREATIVITY AND FLOW - the rest of the technical stuff was left up to us. If Tim had an issue with a rule not being followed or spelling (which is his main pet-peeve), then he would let us know.
He was frustrated over the lack of trophies he was allowed to give - there were a number deserving. You automatically receive a place in the final round by placing with your Gold in this round.
We agreed with Tim on all points, although, agreeance was not an option to his end for us - LOL, ...however, we did agree in your case, nonetheless. As Tim said, this is an excellent piece all the way around. It held impact, passion in love, awesome creativity and flow. We found no glaring technical errors in this. Although there were others he wanted to give the gold to too...he gave the final nod for you. The rest of the trophies and placements were left up to us...unless we could convince him otherwise - in your case, we didn't even try. So....CONGRATULATIONS! - and thankyou for a most excellent write!!
Lionslove and the Judges.
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This, Dear Celtic, is a masterfully woven piece of passion!! It is truly a work of art in every sense. The main thing that comes across is INTENSITY...! ...and that is exactly what Tim was looking for. He has put you on the finalists list. Judging will be completed Friday.
Tim said to give you a big hug...so here ya go...
All the best...and thank you for this great write!
"The Judges"
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Bautiful - just stunning
This is a brilliant poem. I love the words put forth. You can drown in their beauty. The imagery is perfect and the picture you paint is inspiring. Form poetry is sometimes difficult but you have done a wonderful job to create this poem and maintain the flow right to the end. Rosemary -
Celtic...it's obvious it's you...so, I, in your case, will bypass the request to put your AP name in the authors comment box.
I'm THRILLED!!!..YOU ENTERED!! IT'S AN HONOUR...YOUR POEM IS BEAUTFUL...AND I LOVE THE SHAPE..THAT'S ALL I'LL SAY FOR NOW AS THIS IS JUST A WELCOME TO THE CONTEST COMM.
I look forward to more fully absorbing your
masterpiece of love!!!
My final comms and outlook on this piece will
be given at the completion of the contest.
I so appreciate your time and effort in entering!
All the best, ...and good luck......Lionslove
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Oh my now what gave me way?
LOL
I figured you'd know it was me though I was planning on returning today to plpace my name in the box
How could I not enter a contest for love poetry?
I am a sucker for love and a true hopeless romantic
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Shapely!
Celtic Moon, this is lovely - my favorite line is: At break of dawn my soul bows in gratitude for the dreams of love you've inspired.
Keeping a shape is difficult. I'm a beginner at such things. Enjoyed reading your work. For this contest, it's the best I've read so far. Take care.
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I can definetly understand what you are describing, though I am only fourteen, which is proof that you are definetly a good poet. I loved how you shaped the words into a wine glass.
Great write and God bless.
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Katey ~
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Congratulations
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Wow this is exceptionally brilliant. A creative and extremely impressive masterpiece of love. Thanks for your entery into our contest and good luck. James & Jeannie.
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This is so beautiful. The emotions and longing you describe are just perfect. So easy to feel. Well written and very visually pleasing as well. Thanks for entering. Good luck. Jeannie and James
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This is absolutely wonderful Bel, and as I knew you have not let me down. First, your words, flow to perfection. And what can one say about your style.......completely amazing, does not do justice to this. Thank you for chosing this to enter into my challenge.
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TY hun as for the format it was done in my head. Just a picture in my mind and I typed according to what I saw.
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Awesome!
Wow..this was penned awesome..How did u do the format like that?? This is incredible...well done!
Kari -
Wow, what a poem, this is excellent. Looks first class and reads first class too. sj
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Very beautifully done, descriptive and emotional
Love the form as well. Best of luck in the contest.
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soft, loving sensual, yearning, creative this piece ahs it all well done hnu very well done
love and light
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Once again, Stu, I thank you greatly for your comment, thoughts, imput and critque. All are very much appreciated. Your editorial has been taken in to consideration and placed into effect as of this moment
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Hi Bel
Many thanks for submitting this piece. Critique time again ... no, please, come out from behind the sofa!!! hahaha!!!
Topical and Overall Critique:
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Again, a remarkably crafted piece, in terms of not only the marvellous shape-artistry, but the poem itself. I do hope more people devote some proactive study time to your work
Another powerful piece, and again a pleasure-filled, enthralling read you have presented before my screen-weary eyes!!! I was absorbed by your stunning imagery, and it was wonderful that you presented a freshly-focused piece, which actually seems to differ from your previous entry, in being more "about you" and how the other person makes you feel, considering "Natural High" was more about how you would make the other person feel. It is in that sense, that you have endeavoured (wittingly or being unaware) to present me with the "completed jigsaw" of a love scenario! The lines of this poem that especially called-out to me where:
"Drowning in a sea of emotions I care not to be saved from" (said the sailor to the siren!);
"I sit in silence, thinking of you and all that you do" (how many times did I find myself disconnected with the world without my four walls, lying back on the sofa in deep reflection ... contemplation ... oh the memories of that sadly bygone era ~ that quoted line of your poem brought a tear of memory to my eye).
and simultaneously
And also "Let myself fade away to a special place of everlasting love".... yes, the whole fantasy amid reality feeling, perhaps subconscious resonance. Being away from the mundane daily tizwaz and being somewhere with just you and them, where all trivia pales into the blue and only the meaningful moments may flourish.
Again, a wonderfully passionate, emotional and enchanting piece!
Editorial:
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(I know ... you have to consider selectively, so it doesn't tamper with your shape!!!!!!)
Line 1) The comma, directly capping "love", could be replaced with a full-stop, to add more drama/impact. ie to suggest a "deepening desire in the tone of voice; abruptness. "Come with me, my love."
Line 2) Commas are mainly used to allow a pause in a sentence, for the reader to take long sentences more easily, or they can also be used to separate different things: events, actions, and such, as you are likely aware of anyhow ... so I'll shut up!! . As you are saying something different after "chest,", consider a semi-colon (which I call a "compromise between a comma and a full-stop!!!).
Line 12) "Over powering" can be written as one word. Alternatively, you could link them with a hyphen. I felt it seemed a little broken/abandoned as two words. Preferencial suggestion though, nothing major
Lines 21-25) This all reads and flows as one long sentence, so consider punctuating this section (the stem of the chalice)
Line 31) "Spiraling" has two l's; "Spiralling".
And that's the end of that!!!!! Phew ... only about 8 more of these to type!!!!
Thank-you again, Bel, for giving me something wonderfully enthralling to read and critique. It has been a pleasure, and I hope the critique in some way proves useful
Best wishes
Stu
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Congrates sweet soul, love yas, awesome poem!
-Timothy
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Thank you much!
Glad you liked this piece
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Congratulations on an award well deserved excellent write nad wonderful style, have a great day, Ken IBT
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Celtic, very pretty and please forgive the pun, very poetic written. I really like the shape of the chalice. I did one like that, but have posted it here. Nice write very pretty. Merry Christmas Image
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How it touches us....very well written.
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Lovely
Very descriptive. Leaving the mind with images that haunt the
soul and stir the spirit.
The detail you put into this poem alone makes it remarkable.
Not to mention the patience it must hav taken to make the
poem in this artistic designed shape.
The Power of Love is unfathomable! It's births and rebirths
renewed emotions that gives hope and zest to life itself!
A very romantic and emotional write. Lovely!
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I tried to return a happy holiday/seasons greetings by creating a picture using various keyboard symbols, but when I actually posted my creation, AP had it all jumbled that it looked as Moon had said, like pixie dust After the 3rd sprinkle I gave up
Edited on Dec 16, 6:23 because '
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The Christmas pixie dust she was leaving on my author page the other night
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Attributed the the group of sin I am in?
No, but instead attributed to the one who has captured my heart. As for the group, there are some awesome people there but the man that runs it is a friend and asked me to join, so I did
I'm glad you like this piece. I was sitting here last night and it just came to my mind. Putting the shape to it was just something I thought I would try as I have never done that before. I think it worked well for doing it free hand while typing the piece out.
Actually the title is what came to mind first for some strange reason. I usually write a piece then title it later.
Thank you for your wonderful words and applauds always very much appreciated hun
Blessings
Bel -
What Christmas pixie dust?!! (sorry Bel, a reply to my AP daughter SwtAsWine!)
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Wow, another cool one! Are these attributed to that new group of sin's you are in?!!! And as I was reading I was hoping you'd bring it all together in the last lines, and you DID! A deserved applause here, Bel!
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How creative. It even became a chalice. I love it.
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This is really lovely. It makes me want to go out and fall in love, but alas I don't believe I have ever felt that strongly about someone. Though this poem makes me want to very much---you describe it soo beautifully.
Great addition of making your poem into the shape of a goblet and I appreciate the way your poem was a flowy rush--not too mechanical, but straight from the heart <3 -
Thank you much Linda.
Your words are always such a blessing as are you.
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Thank you oh so much sis.
This wasn't as complicated as you might think.
I had a picture in my head and went with it
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Always a pleasure to have you grace my work with your sweet words my dear Tim. Thank you much!
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I thank you kindly my dear.
Your words are as special and precious as you.
Many blessings to you
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Very lovely style and great write, love the form that you chose to go with your write..keep penning away.. lovely pieces that you share..Linda
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Superb!
Well we see you have no problems with your muse . This was really good. I have only made one shape poem in my life, and it wasn't nearly this complicated!!!! Excellent, flow and feel hon.
~Carrie
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Talk about Romantic, passion, and creativity all rollled up in one divine cup..This is a most lovely write, thanks so much my friend for sharing you! Always good to see you penning, much love to you and yours!
-Timothy
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This is a beautiful piece in every aspect from form, words, sentiments....everything
and I have to admit that your image poetry here turned out better than my christmas pixie dust
Truly poignant and I wish you the best always
~Swt
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Sis,
As always I thank you kindly for your sweet words.
They like your heart are precious....
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passionate~
Oh my my
You have certainly outdid yourself with this passionate poem sis
And I love that you shaped it in the form of a Chalice
Desire..raw..intense...passionate...and beautiful all rolled into one...You go sis
Love it
Hugs
Susan~~~
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beautiful
i think the presentation is fantastic
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Wow, what a intense poem. Full of nothing but raw emotion and desire at its best. I liked this one a lot. You did a excellent job at describing your emotion to the readers. Bravo!
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OMG.. That is awesome.. The chalice and the write both.. Shew I bet ya need a hanky after all that.. Beautiful,
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It was done completely and totally by hand my dear. I had a picture in my mind and I ran with it.
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Just curious to know if you have used InDesign to make the glass shaped text, or where you crazy enough to do it by hand?
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I give it a 10!
This is beautiful. Your creativity, and ability to project the emotion and longing are outstanding.
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wonderful poem
ooh I love this poem, i love the style, well done and well written...
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I thank you once again my dear lady for such kind words.
They are very much appreciated
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Beautiful Flow
This is exquisite both in presentation and the breathtaking words. It exudes with passion, desire and love!
hugs,
Nicole
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