Born in a little town,Bethlehem,
In a manger,No room in the inn,
The world rejoices,saved from sin,
Open their hearts to him,
The savior born,
Son of Mary,
Holy,
One.
Author notes
nonet 9 lines syllables 9 8 7 6 5 4 3 2 1 "
Written December 14th, 2005
T h e - H u m a n - S t a i n
A contest entry
- Christmas contest by Elvenfairy.
300 points, ended October 18, 2006, 7 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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Nice job but I am wondering if it is center aligned? If it is ... never mind but if not you might want to try it for appearance sake. I am wondering about your use of capitalization also. You use a comma to end some lines and then use upper case in the very next line ... ?
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Nice job! Thanks for your entry. I loved how it was composed and how true it is.
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Did you read my rules at all? If so, you either skipped #5, or you entered this just to spite me. Either way, you are disqualified.
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ohhh..very nice religious write...simple..short..but so well done...quite a write poet! nicely expressed
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hmm im not religious but i was indeed impressed!
Thiis was great and was real real good!
Well done on a great write!
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I like the way you did this - I could picture it as a carol / hymn to be honest.
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thank you for entering.
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This is not my religion, but I also can appreciate the quality of this, and the heart that it came from. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Am not a religious guy but can appreciate the quality of this write. Good luck in the contest.
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nice thank you for entering and good luck
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Wow nice! I've never tried writing a nonet before, or any structured poem for that matter, really. This is such a beautiful poem. I feel as if you have an excess of commas, though, and you could take some of them out or replace them with a different sort of punctuatio, because they disrupt the natural flow.
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Thanks for entering! It's a sweet piece! There are a few grammatical errors, though- you need a space after the commas. But aside from that, thanks for entering!
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Thank you for your entry
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Shancy was your judge for the contest… it was a nice piece but like shancy said, there was no name in the author's notes so this score she gave you couldn't go to a name… thank you for entering and participating in our contest and good luck,
~luminescence
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I'm going to be quick commenting because of the abundance of entries so here is your score: Title: 6 Diction: 8 Syntax: 6 Wowness factor: 6 Total: 26. Thank you so much for entering and participating and good luck. Shancy.
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Thanks for teaching me a new style of poetry. I may even dabble in that style some day. I see this one can put everyone in the holiday spirit. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year. I want to thank you for entering my "Invite Only; Me On Their List" contest.
Ted E
PS: Once I have commented on all of your entries, then I will reread them all and choose the one that will be brought forward for being selected as Gold, Silver, Bronze or HM.
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Lovely and pretty. May God bless you, his grace and radiance guide you through. Thank you for sharing with us, His grace.
Luv,
~Candy
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thank you for entering with this very beautiful little write, it is full of love, good luck in the contest
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Unfortunately this fine poem
does not reach the set min. of 12 lines.
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very lovely
thank you for ntering this very lovely sweet write with us and good luck in the contest.this is very lovely and flows well the style is great
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beautiful!!! much said in few words. i like this! you are very talented. keep on writing. God bless you
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Short but to the point.
An excellent post for this year and it says all it needs to in these verses. You did an excellent job on it.
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Thank you for your entry.
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A smart, amazing, and uplifting poem!
I am smiling and thinking I would like to try a poem like this one. Thank you for sharing your fine talent with us. This lovely poem is so fine!
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Much with few words
In a few words you capture both the Christmas story and the reason why he was born. You say much with few words. -
Hi Everlast. A lovely heartfelt write. You tell the story of our Lord's birth beautifully in this piece. Thanks so much for sharing it with us. Shelley
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Awwwwe! this is really good. You told the whole story in such a short amount of words!! This is very sweet and I loved the form you used. GBY
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Beautiful
Thank you for placing this on the reading page of the group. God bless you.
Tabitha
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very sweet
that is most different and very sweet. I wish the whole world had rejoiced (us good Christians did) but there are way too many sinners in the melting pot and those who do not rejoice will find no peace on earth this Christmas. Well done dear. -
Excellent
This is a fantastic use of the nonet form. Very well done. -
excellent
Wonderful job, you tell the story of the ultimate Christmas gift very well. Best wishes for the competition. -
this was a nice little poem. It got the message accross in a simple yet complex way. I liked this poem. Thanks for enetring it into my conetst. Merry Christmas and good luck!
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You are correct
Being 11 is a tough age, because you are just entering the world and people are starting to see you as a human being. You are still a kid, but you are in the process of finding out who you are. This poem explains a part of who you are, a follower. I myself am not religious, I do believe in god but I don't go to church or anything. This is a pretty poem. For a first one, you did great! 
thanks for entering my contest. Good luck
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Beautiful words! Great job and I love it. God Bless You!
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could it be because i havent been writing long and im jsut a kid?
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YOiu are a rule follower and move to round 2. Well done but not as strong as some of the others, sorry.
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Really good write my dear. I hope you keep up your faith and keep writing.
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Very nice, I thought this was lovely, although it did kind of remind me of a song I used to sing as a child in sunday school during Christmas time. The form is interesting also, but in the contest rules I did ask for free verse and no end line rhymes. Thank you very much for entering my contest
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wonderful piece. good job! thanks for entering.
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Well done this is written really well, i like the flow, thanks for sharing. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Really wonderful poem. I've never heard of "nonet" before, sounds interesting
I've seen you are "only" eleven, great job on this! Good subject and rhyme.
Keep it up!
LittleAnn
Edited on May 29, 1:23 p.m. because ''. -
its a nonet
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it appears like some sort of shape poetry.. not sure if it is. Anyway, well done little one. you have done a sweet little job here. AM sure u will imrpove in the coming days, a lot more to go.. Best of luck in all ur attempts and do write more, we look forward to read your works.
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wonderful job with this poem. I do agree if you did center it it would make the presentation look nicer. your rhyming was beautiful and your message is preached loud and clear a very beautiful job with this poem * smiles * Sincerely, Paul
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I think this would work better if it was centered...would show off the form more. You definitely said what you needed to...and the form is pretty good, as far as following the rules.
Nice.
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What an uplifting and beautiful piece ....Makes my heart all warm...Good luck with the other judges..Thia is lovelt....
Paula Abdul ....hehe (Lynda )
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AMAZING!!!!!! *smile*
i like this poem because it's about Jesus (our savior) being born! I agree with grossmutti! it's a good subject and it rhymes! -
Yeah sorry about the spelling I thought it was wrong but I wasn't sure I haven't seen it in print for a while...also I have never heard of a nonet so that was refreshing and it was a sweet little poem great job and good luck in the contest All the best
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Very Well Done
VERY well done, and you rhymed also!!! I find that amazing. Well told story and very important to remember at this time of year.
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