Forever Dreaming
Woke in the moonlight
Whispering clear
Secrets that no one
Was ever to hear
Looked around madly
Anyone there?
Silence means safety
From Waking World's glare
Dreams conjure quickly
Need not make sense
Waking World never
Can be so immense
I want to stay dreaming
Which spell can you cast
I want to stay dreaming
No future, no past
Say that you'll help me
I don't care how
Forever Dreaming
The here and the now
Sprinkled with stardust
Weaving through space
Try all you want still
You won't see my face
This scene is perfect
Dreams you can fly
Take on your worst fears
And know you can't die
Closest to magic
New are my dreams
They are my solace
From Waking World's screams
I want to stay dreaming
Which spell can you cast
I want to stay dreaming
No future, no past
Say that you'll help me
I don't care how
Forever Dreaming
The here and the now
Forever Dreaming
Within is my vow...
What did you think
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this is prolly the best one i read all night. seriosly. your description was great. i once had a dream i was killed, i was stabbed in the stomach and i actually felt death creaping in. i grew numb, but then it all faded and everything was great. there was a girl with me now, and we danced amongst the night sky. the wind gentle, cool, and crisp. we laughed as we played above the land and below the stars. ur write well.
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OMG this is amazing, it remieded me of an Eveanescence song call "i must be dreaming", it gives the same powerful feeling, i know this feeling. good luck and take care-heart
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Great poem and very powerful! I love dreaming, and you captured the sense of escaping this world so perfectly! Keep up the great work!
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This is a great poem.
Shahrzad
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Heres that applause that I promised you, I wanted to make sure I came back and applauded this because I love it! Great work again!
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Excellent
Beautiful imagery in this poem. Immediately sweeps the reader up in a world we are all familiar with. The things we can do when we dream... sometimes it's not as impossible as it feels. Anyway, before I start to ramble I'll cut myself off. Stunning work, keep exploring!
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I put you on my Fav's because your work is growing on me. I sense your are on a journey and your work is an esential part of it. I like these two lines in particular...
Take on your worst fears
And know you can't die
I understand your work more now.
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Amazing Work!!!!!!! I think this is a great poem because that is what keeps us moving on, that is what keeps us fight, that is what keeps us alive
reaming. And i like the title that you have chosen.GOOD JOB!
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I LOVE THIS OMGOSH YOUR SO TALENTED ROCK ON MAN ROCK ON!!!!! Your really talented you should definatly try sending this one in for a contest or something I bet you'd make a lot of money off of this piece!!!
Great Write
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Beautiful poem. I especially loved the, i suppose chorus
I want to stay dreaming
Which spell can you cast
I want to stay dreaming
No future, no past
Say that you'll help me
I don't care how
Forever Dreaming
The here and the now
Amazing work
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Finaly someone who makes an effort to use talent! This is one of the finner pieces I have read on AP. Thanks for showing me that there are people who can write about other things than cutting or God. Use that talent some more!
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excelent overall
It flows fairly well, though a bit short in a couple of lines. It Had excellent imagery and was very beautifull. I commend you for your excellent work -
Awsome
A powerful poem. I loved it. I think everyone needs to dream; in sleep or every min. of everyday. I think it's a beautiful. I hope you find you dreams someday. Not everyone is lucky enough to find them.
Nana Nichole
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very well written
You have described how good it feels to escape the reality of this world. It would be nice if we could feel free and so good as we do in our dreams. I use to love to dream that I could fly. It felt so great.
We all need an escape from the stresses of this world, and your poem was just perfect.
etherealforu
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Nicely done
Wow. Really powerful words. It reminded me vaguely of a sort of villanelle-list poem hybrid or something. I really like the rhyme and rhythm, as well as the images. Realistic subject, and one that pretty much everyone can relate to (I know I can!!). The only thing I would change is I would put more punctuation--make most of the lines end-stopped, and inclued a few caesuras--so that the poem can be read slower. -
B-E-Autiful! I really enjoyed it! Your words are so vibrant and really relay your message!
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The rhyming in this poem is especially good, it flows well. This is a beautiful poem and I truly enjoyed reading it. You are really talented, keep it up!
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Beaytiful, simply amazing. i loved the last verse....so powerful. I wish I could stay dreaming too. No future no past...thnak you for the smile of the day.
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Beautiful, simply beautiful. I love the emotion and the meaning, very nicely written. Great poem and keep on writing!
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Forever dreaming... I like this work, it has a lovely tone to it and is built around your central idea quite well. Exquisite write. Great job!
~noir ~
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Good write!
HMMMMM!!!!!
Well, i really enjoyed this poem.
Your diction did a lot for you.
It worked hand in glove with your message.....This poem flowed sweetly.
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I think we're all dreamers at one time. This poem was beautiful and wonderful to read. Great rhythm. The overall feel ws just so uplifting! Great job! -xx Amy
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neato
wow, this was amazingly beautiful. It flows soo well, and I love the format you used for it. It is absolutely awesome! The message being portrayed is really strong, and it's a good point. I really enjoyed reading this.
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I like this alot. I am also a dreamer. Check out my poem "Cloud of Rest". It's kinda similiar to this one.
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this is an AWESOME POEM!!!! i'm speechless...
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GREAT JOB!!!!! :F
I TRULY BELIEVE THIS IS REALLY A LOVELY PIECE... WELL WRITTEN AND AWESOMELY EXPRESSED..... YOU FRIEND, ANGEL
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Oh I wish I had another applause to give! I will bookmark this and give it tomorrow. I absolutely adored this poem. I think everyone at some point in their life wishes they could just dream and not wake up in reality. This was beautifully written, very very well done!
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Well it is a true description of the heart who is lost in the magic of this great world too. The thoughts are very heartfelt and creating the effect of the gimmick of the reality of this world through and through. The beauty of the write lies in its travel of the notions and the definations about the beahavioural patterns of this dry world. The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar
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great imagery.
i liked it.
and I enjoyed reading it.
great job.
keep it up.
~Midnite rae
[the morbid mistress]
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Beautiful
Very nice.. I think as poets we all have dreams..
Nicely written, I liked this very much
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