Please do not weep, I
have not gone
I'm here with you, I've
been all along
So please don't think of
me and grieve,
I am still here, I
did not leave
The shadow you see,
upon your wall
Tis me looking over, cause
I heard your call
I didn't leave you, it
isn't as it seems
I will always be there,
inside your dreams
So please don't think of
me and weep
I am there watching
as you sleep
Don't assume I'm
just a memory
Because I live on, when you
speak of me
So please don't think of
me and grieve
I'm still with you, if
you believe!
Author notes
For mom: Nancy R. McDermott: Also to all those who have lost a loved one and experienced this grief! This was written after a writing that was read at her service and really touched me!
Written December 13th, 2005
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Wonderful work, would it be possible for you to give me permission to use this particular verse for my 7yr old son to read at my grandmothers funeral - of course you will be credited & i would be truly grateful. Many many thanks in anticipation. L
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Sharp -- I have experience tremendous grief and loss, and it is indeed a comfort to think that we have a spirit that might still be involved in our well-being. A wonderful poem for the funeral. Thanks for sharing.
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Perfect
This is just beautiful. I'm adding it to my favorites list and will send it to a friend who is lost in grief. Bless you for writing such a touching and insightful poem. This has power to help others when they need it most.
Mark
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Beautiful
Such an emotional subject, so well written, but not to me it seems in a out and out emotional way. Quite upbeat and cheery for those left behind to remember.
I love this,
Andrew
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Beautiful write.
This is truly a awsome write. So up lifting for someone whom has lost their mother, I am working on a book right now for my husbands mother, that passed away last year. These are not easy to write I commend you on this awsome piece of true poetry. aw as I read it again so beautiful! -
Bravo
I still have my mother and thank God for it, But the tragedy of loosing people we loose so much sometimes the words you wrote are just what one needs to hear.
I like your style on this poem, one of my favs in fact. I look forward to reading more.
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That was absoultly lovely and thank you it did help somewhat and i will deff add you to be my aunt!
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Thank you spamwitch for this touching verses full of true love and deep feelings. I am sure that Lepekaha will read it and accept your very special and kind support.
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wonderful!
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It's deffinately a difficult subject, even I struggle with to this day. I am glad you like it though, it brings me so much comfort at times, which is why I featured it again.
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I am so glad that you liked this, if you could be so kind as to send me the links to your poems, it would be appreciated. I've had a few sent to me, but because I had IM's going nuts at times, I would forget the title before I got to the home page. I really want to read them, it's just easier with a link.
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Heart touching
A truly touching poem! Full of emotion that flows so smoothly and gently over the eyes and ears, connects well with so many people, myself included. We can all related to feelings of lost, and that despair that you will never, ever see them again, but yet, they have never left. They are still here, with us. Keeping us safe. And it's the most comforting thought. To put that feeling into words isn't always easy, so kudos on constructing a moving and very beautiful poem. I'm sure it brought tears to so many eyes, again, mine included. You should feel proud of what you have accomplished here. An applause, well deserved, goes to you, m'dear. -
beautiful/true from the heart
Very beautiful poem!! This really touches my heart because my Mom just passed away. I noticed one stanza that really touched my heart..
I didn't leave you alone, it isn't as it seems
I will always be there, in your dreams
If I could suggest.....
I wrote 2 poems called A Mother's Love is Forever, and Goodbyes Are Not Forever. Excellent job. -
Good job, great flow!
This made me think of my Grandpa, he died about 5 yrs ago. 6 in Feb. I liked this because it was comforting. I have a poem you might like, "His wandering"...I think it's my best about him. Anyway, thanks for sharing, great job. -
So glad in some way this touched you. It's been almost 3 years now, and I still feel like it was yesterday. The things I've experienced, confusion and the like, not knowing if I was dreaming it, I find the hardest. but I'm sure you've had similar experiences.
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Breathtaking and made me think of my mother. Oh how I miss her. she died 7 years ago. I really took your touching and beautiful words to heart and realize that she is looking over me as I write this. Lovely poem, I loved everything about it. You also did a nice job with your attention to detail...like meter, which many poets seem to forget about.
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This is lovely. I really enjoyed this. If I may suggest, I have a poem that you might enjoy called, Darling Do Not, check it out!
Amanda
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Thank you shubs, as always, very nice to hear from you, and your comments are always generous!
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The apparent simplicity with which you send across profound messages is an art of a magician at work and then me the reader can just watch and gape,hypnotised that I am at this apparent concoction of life's travesty whence a dear departs but then you put this succinctly over here....kudos..Shubs
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it's not theft at all Spam...it anything it was a translation and extension of that beautiful poem. I'll always remember that poem having been read at my father's funeral, but I will now also remember your poem. I know so much of your own pain and sadness went into writing this...but if only you sense the peace and resolution that your poem has brought to others.
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NoWayJo,
Your words mean much to me because I am an admirer of your work. I loved that reading, and really hoped that writing this would not be considered theft. I really liked the beat of that reading, and wanted so much to put it to my own words,. Your comment meant the world to me.
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Beautiful/Touching
I cannot even begin to tell you how touched I am by this piece. This really goes straight to my heart because I am going through losing my 2 1/2 year old daughter from Congestive Heart Failure on October 4, 2005. Everything you wrote are the things I know and feel, but it is so hard to believe them. I try very hard to believe and it's people like you who continue to give me hope. Thanks for such a beautiful write. I love it! -
this poem brought to mind so much the poem which Bookdragon had noted in his comments above which we said at my own father's funeral. I know the writing of this poem was difficult for you and hope that you do see this passing as you have translated it in this poem. so very poignant and sad a poem, yet there feels to be such a sense of peace too.
excellent writing Spamwich and I'm truly glad I had the chance to read this.
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A very beautiful poem with a lovely message. This is very touching to me right now being as I am going through a series of family deaths and illnesses. Wonderful job.
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This is a very sweet poem. Lots of hope and love. That's always good.There's a poem I wrote... called Sleeping with you. You may like it... it's SORT OF like this... but... ehh... darker. lol. And a little twisty. LOL. Well good job here!
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That's very sweet, thank you!
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I applaud because it is such a poignant poem. Plus, it's good!
But I've had the rather unique experience of being in the room with three of my loved ones as they've passed on, and each one was quite different, as were the people themselves. Which I bring up because during each, while everyone else in the room was watching the body, I was looking up, trying to see their essence leaving, knowing that it continues on.
My condolences for your mother.
peace
doug
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What a truly beautiful and inspirational write.
Thanks so much for sending me the link to this.
It's not only beautifully written, it's true as well.
I am going to bookmark this one for the times I need a lift.
~Sherry~
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Very beautiful write,very touching,brings comfort,this is very beautiful,and yes you are right it is over someone passing away(my father) and for his brother whom is about to,due to the same reasons,thank you for your comforting words,best of luck to you...luvmybabys...
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this is so pretty and so sad but it feels good to read it too.
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your mother was obviously a wonderfull woman who nurtured and cared for you well. This tribute is obviously very reflective of how much she loved you, and how she will continue to look over and protect you. I'm sorry for your loss, she must have been a wonderful woman. Well rhymed, lovely structure, very fitting background and just plain beautiful words. Louise
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this is so beautiful and full of hope. xxxx
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this really did bring tears to my eyes today, i have been thinking about my father, he died almost 20 years ago but i still miss him so much..this is a beautiful write, and i thank you for sharing it here.
rebeka
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ok now i am of sound mind this is a really sweet write, touching and soft! a beautiful tribute to someone so obviously special in your heart i love the rhyming scheme that you have used and the way that this poem is so obviously heartfelt very well done i love this xx Cheryl
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well it is just a very true and very touchy work of the hearts. The sentiments of the write are just very divine bringing the flavour of the eternity too. I must say it is just magival and very beautiful penning..a great work and thank you so much for praising my poem too.
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A TRULY TOUCHING AND EXTREMELY BEAUTIFUL POEM
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aww,, thank you transcendental baby
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This is a lovely, heart-healing tribute to the memory of your mother spam ... it touches all of us who have lost loved ones
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Yes, I believe that is very true as well, thanks for your sweet comment!
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A very beautiful poem. This is so touching because I think anyone who has ever lost a love one only wants to know that that person is still near them. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem.
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beautiful and touching well done xx Cheryl (sorry am touched by this will come back and re-reveiw later xx)
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nice...
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I can relate even though my pain isn't near as deep as this poem seems to be. Hopefully that made sense....
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wow.. reallyy good! I love the end..the part that says "if you believe" oh that is sooo true. Awesome job, it flows great!
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Grade A+++++
This is an excellent tribute to your loved one! It spoke deeply to me, I myself lost my grandfather 5 yrs ago. It's comforting to know that he is alright. Thank you!!
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I am glad it touched you!
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excellent poem
Wow. That is excellent. I have never seen a poem with such strong emotion, it really makes a person think and when someone has just lost someone, its a really good poem of encouragement and sympathy. Keep up the great work. -
This is the second well written rhyme poem I've read today, something that doesn't usually happen seeing as I'm a free verse fan. You pulled this off well. I noticed a few patterns that made this both distinctive and original. Best of luck with the contest. Take care and God bless.
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-()- This was beautiful! Such emotion! Great job!
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Excellent
Very good, borrows heavily froma very well known poem in the begining at least.
Well written, this is actually the second of yours I have read, you have very definate style.
I like this piece alot.
James
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I like the subject of this poem... it hits a bit of a cord in my heart... but then I can relate to it. It flows well, you could probably even put a melody to it. keep it up. -
Loved it
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Oh Shawn, you know those feelings go both ways s After all, you are one of the first people who made me feel welcome here...remember? And I've held you dear ever since
~ Becky ~
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So awsome that you liked!!! Thank you!
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I can only say that it does bring comfort and I hope that helps you!
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AMAZING!
Beautiful beautiful beautiful write! It almost brought me to tears. Tis a wondferful write. So wonderful that it deserves a bookmark. Amazing write!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
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This was beautiful. It is a comfort to think that my brother would be saying this looking down upon me.
Anyway Great Work.
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This is really sweet... I liked how you described the way you want the person to remember you for who you are and not just a memory... This is really good..
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A great poem!
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SqueakyH,,,I can only write what has touched me, this is based on someone elses idea, see above comments,,,but I am glad it touched you, and I am truly sorry for your loss as well. I am haunted by th e original write, so I tried my own version. Be well and feel free to contact me whenever!
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pretty good stuff
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Becky, I so appreciate your input as usual. you have been a total inspiration on me on this site,,my dear friend, thank you for reading this, and giving me your input, it is appreciated, as I hold you very dear to my heart!
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Wow you did an amazing job with this! Great work,keep it up.
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Oh, Shawn...what a beauty. Of course, you know how I feel about death. I believe that the dead are so close to us we can reach out and touch them. That we do, more or less, journey through this 'life cycle' together and wait for each other and make many journeys together. This is WHY I believe in soul mates, deep spiritual friendships; ties that bind. Those people you feel you immediately connect to? I believe there is a reason why. I think it is because you already know them. You just don't realize it. But those are my beliefs; from my own experiences and recollections.
I do believe in 'those shadows on the walls', so this poem is very beautiful to me. I lived the dreams for 23 years, so I can't debate that one. This is absolutely stunning! Thank you so much for sharing this with me tonight
Many blessings and s
~ Becky ~
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Aurelia: my name derives from my initials which are SPM,,started as SPAM, and evolved from there, but I love Monty Python as well so thanks,,also thanks for reading and commenting,,means so much!
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Thanks Doc, you know I respect all that you have to say, this was a tuff one for me, I still don't really know where I stand on the situation, but I appreciate your comments!
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this was so touching,i lost a dear friend in march and the night i heard of his death i stayed up all night writing about him and how he could make me laugh when i really wanted to punch something. just writing about our lost loved ones keeps them with us. somehow it seems you can feel them at the times you really need just them and no one else. your poem says this. thank you for sharing
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First, your username reminds me of Monty Python's Spamalot. Second, wonderful poem. The flow and the rythym and the rhyme scheme just... they couldn't be better. You wrote this beautifully and it is so very filled with love. Congratulations on a writing a beautiful and beautifully simple piece. Keep it up. And have a happy holiday season.
Aurelia Finn
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Pain4life: Thank you and i am truly sorry, I absoloutely understand,, my mom and dad believe it or not were put on Hospice the same day,,my dad is still here with me,,or I should say I with him, but I have been in that situation before..IM me whenever you want, I can really relate! Please, let me know how things work out for you,,I really do want to know!
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Shawn,
You mother would be proud, I'm sure. I know that she looks down, listening for each new piece you write and immediately committing each one to memory. This is a touching piece and a great tribute.
~Doc
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i do believe this poem was read at my brother funeral i love this poem it is very touching
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excellent
This piece touched my heart as I have lost and am loosing a loved one now. very good writing and it will stay with me. Thank you -
I love that piece of poetry, especially the short excerpt, "I am a thousand winds that blow" That is just beautiful. I liked your poem a great deal, too. It's nice when we have a muse to inspire us, or we can be inspired by another writer. It pays to read a lot.
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Amazing... Great Job I am speechless... I really cannot put how much I love this poem in words... keep writing!!
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Bookdragon,,,you are correct, that piece hit me and is in my head..I did my best on my own, but certainly that is the piece!
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This is so inspirational and full of hope. I think everyone who has passed on that we were close to is still with us... and yes, you must believe... everytime i hear my grandmother's voice in my head... i believe :-) or a memory triggers something that gives you strength.
Beautiful poem, I really enjoyed this one.
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The original reading mean so much to me as well..i am so glad it touched you and your mother. This is what we need to think of in the dark moments. Sorry to hear of your loss. I hope you all find peace.
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My grandmother passed away last friday, and this poem really uplifted me. I showed it to my mother and she loved it as well. This is beautiful, and thank you, for bringing some hope back into my life.
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I am sorry for your loss. I lost my mother 16 years ago and it still hurts at time knowing she is not here.(for my tribute poem to her see allpoetry.com/Poem/1597833 ) I was wondering if the following is the poem that was read at your mothers funeral? I clicked on your poem because it's title made me think of this poem by Mary Frye
Do Not Cry For Me
Do not stand at my grave and weep,
I am not there, I do not sleep.
I am a thousand winds that blow,
I am the softly falling snow.
I am the gentle showers of rain,
I am the fields of ripening grain.
I am in the morning hush,
I am in the graceful rush.
Of beautiful birds in circling flight,
I am in the starshine of the night.
I am in the flowers that bloom,
I am in a quiet room.
I am in the birds that sing,
I am in each lovely thing.
Do not stand at my grave and cry,
I am not there, I do not die.
Mary E. Frye
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I thank you, it was inspired by a writing listed in the comments, very pretty writing, and thanks for enjoying my version.
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This was perfectly flawless. The rhyme the flow, everything fit together to make an amazing poem. This reminded me of my dad...as much as I cry for him, this gives me a new perspective on the whole situation...I loved this piece, it was absolutely perfect!!!!!!!!!! Keep up the good work. MuchLoveAlways~Jessica
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This was gorgeous in its
pain and wording. A masterful
dedication, thank you for sharing.
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please do not stand at my grave and weep, for i am not there, i do not sleep.. thats the reading? its beautiful and so is your poem. sorry about your loss
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