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Crystallized Sorrow

Lost along the Mobius Roads of life
Dependant on the support of others
Wanting friendship above all
Yet, cast aside with local refuse

Tormented souls wail unto the stars
Shattered and alone, hollow bone
Bloodlife draining, heart failure
Intervigillum Viviardum Viator

Bringers of death, punishment for sin
The greatest sin, caring for others
Betrayed by the abandoned, lost
Falling forever, eternal damnation

Hatred bred in the stone of heart
Vengeance quelled in cinder blocks
Seated upon a mighty frozen throne
The king of despair, I've become

Shaking the foundation of humanity
Sing the sorrows of Eons past
Heartless, hollow, vigilant
An Unmarked grave I shall remain

Author notes

When your friends betray you and leave you in the dust, what more can you do but sing your sorrows?
Written December 13th, 2005

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  • Solus
    May 16, 2006
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    Sad and good

    Deep, touching, poignant this remains with you and adds to you a touch of such sadness ad brokenness. I guess the broken feeling came from the state of the relationship that bore this poem. Great use of language, vivid and creative imagery. Wonderful use of words. Great read.