Life begins peaceful and slow,
Physically and mentally she starts to grow.
The process is hard and takes so long,
She will emerge beautiful just like a song.
The changes begin first with her heart,
From her original form she will soon part.
It's a painful process filled with fear,
But all that she needs will soon be near.
Quiet and still the night falls deep,
This is a night she will get no sleep.
Turmoil and confusion fill her brain,
Her only hope is that she'll weather the strain.
If you catch her changing it might cause alarm,
You care so deeply for her and wish her no harm.
The fear is intense and doubts arise,
But all will be banished by the light in her eyes.
When she escapes the confines of her private jail,
Up into the sky like a ship she will sail.
She flutters around darting here and there,
Graces a moment then travels elsewhere.
When she settles down in a beloved place,
A smile will spread quickly across your face.
The reason she landed there will hit you then,
She chose you to be her very best friend.
She will never leave, her trust and love is complete,
You can feel it deep inside with every heartbeat.
You want to posess her in your heart and soul deep,
Constantly seeing visions of her in your peaceful sleep.
There may be times she will take to the sky,
She just needs to escape stretch her wings and fly.
Remember this- if she flies from you,
Give her time- your Butterfly will always return to you.
Author notes
Written December 13th, 2005
A contest entry
- Metaphorically Speaking... by crimsonfury.
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This is a beautiful write. It made me think of love and how sometimes people might just have to wait for some time before love comes around.
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A lovely poem great flow to the words and the imagery is great thank you for this entry just remember to follow the rules and your in there...
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This is a deep and awesome poem you have penned here. You have painted a beautiful picture with your words. Good work.
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Please read my rules, because I asked for entrants to write who they were describing and what they were describing them as in their Author’s Comment. I’m not taking this into account during the judging process – I’ll judge every entry fairly – however I still think it is important.
Some of your rhyming sounded a bit forced, however you managed to create some beautiful imagery within your piece. The messages behind this poem are great, and you conveyed them well. While not exactly what I was after, this poem was well written and an enjoyable read.
Thankyou for entering!
~crimsonfury
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i envye you for I can not rhyme to save my life..this is very thoughtful anf romantic. I enjoyed it very much!! -
I like this metaphor you have painted. Some may view it as a parent wanting to be protective of his/her child and then being in awe at the result of the child's growth into an adult. Others could see it as an outsider observing one who has had to endure some awful experiences but through the learning process, that one has become a stronger individual.
Good job with this write. I enjoyed the read.
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This is deep and romantic and simply B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L.
Very excellent poem - and the flow is also fantastic 
You certainly have very good writing abilities. I love the ending and butterflies! I’m looking forward to reading more of your work! Thank you very much for sharing your words with all of us here. I would like to take this opportunity to welcome you to AllPoetry. I know being new to a site you may have a few questions or concerns, so please feel free to ask any greeter or use the "Help" tab at the top of your page ♥Cindy♥
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