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Hollow



Lost is the sound
of breaking hearts,
in a hollow existence.

Beating in murmurs
of blue, against a
crying sky.

Grounded in a meaningless
life, where mere mortals
sip of pleasures disgust.

Calling goes unfulfilled,
when trust dies,
and faith lies dormant.

Ones wings insignificant,
in a world where all
wear breaking hearts.

 

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Written December 12th, 2005

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  • MuddyKing
    March 23, 2006
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    Kind lady I am only a product of what I have learned from hours of reading. The guitar and art are my true loves. Thank you for the kind comment and have a wonderful day
    Peace Muddy


  • TanitaP
    March 23, 2006
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    Oh wow, this is truly amazing. I love it, you always make me sit back and marvel at the words on the screen and think to myself what an incredibly talented individual you are. Beautiful as always.
    T

  • Thedragonisgone
    December 17, 2005
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    a truly relatable piece. i don't have a critique. all I can say is hollowness is often preferred with a breaking heart; however if that were so it wouldn't hurt so damn bad and then there wouldn't be so many crying volumes of poetry.


  • Anthony-
    December 17, 2005
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    I think that this piece lends itself to be read aloud. It presents itself beautifully also on the page. I hope that you are well. Fantastically chosen words you have here. Tony.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    December 17, 2005
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    You know, this one hurts. It makes you ache deep inside where you thought that part of you was hollow and unfeelings. Awesome piece Muddy! Hugs, Gypsy


  • jaunty pill gold member
    December 13, 2005
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    This is strong and powerful. I especially like the short uses of each stanza...They seem so well-thought out. Not once did I say , "Well , What the hell does that mean"... "How does that stanza fit with the next"...Which is very good to see.

    The other night while I was reading your stuff I felt like I could easily just slip inside your writing and make myself a nice comfortable little seat. Certainly a winner in my book. That second stanza is by far my favorite.

    Good stuff. Glad to have met on a poetic level.

    Be well .
    James


  • MuddyKing
    December 13, 2005
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    you inspired a fellow poet..there is nothing wrong with that...have a wonderful holiday season
    Peace Muddy


  • Vickie J
    December 13, 2005
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    I am so sorry, I had already closed the contest-I dont know how these last couple slipped in, because I had hit judging contest and they didn't show up on the contest page until I finished. This was an excellent write-I apologize if I did anything wrong.vj

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