Hidden among my every move
Planned like a bank heist
My true feelings smothered
Under my smiling mask
No one sees I'm being fake
Mask strong as stone
And just as see through
Cause I'm really not ok
The cold and cruel world
Buried under ten feet of dirt
Maggots of this world
Eating slowly at my rotting corpse
Dig and claw my way out
Seeking the blue light
To find my escape
Rise above the mud
As if a demon spawned
But it was only me
Standing above my recent grave
Hold up my heavy head
Weighed down by society’s standards
The hate of world pierced through my face
Bowing my head down in forced shame
Begin the walk across the field of thorns
Know you will come out broken
Try to survive this not so simple game we call life
Author notes
Written December 12th, 2005
That was the Original date for the Original poem... I have recently gone back to it and make it a better poem.
The poem is about a time in life and still where I hide who I am, I use to have no way to deal with my emotions so I just buried them, then worse than now. So the poem is about me burying my emotions deep in side. Hiding it from the world and by the end of the poem I was coming out of that, starting my way to deal with things and to unbury those emotions.
A contest entry
- left overs ! ( a truthwriter's contest ) by sweethelper.
300 points, ended May 19, 2006, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write Me To Tears by SilentMoonlight.
2700 points, ended November 3, 2008, 67 entries
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wow. this is real, and the emotions here were so raw. i like the depth of this, and how it told a story. keep the faith alive!
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Beauty of silence
thank you very much. =D
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Depression isn't fun; its something we all go through and with any hope most of us pull through it.
This did seem a bit mechanical. Use more describing words really pour yourself into it; thats what poetry is for. It seems like you tried to set off on this but you held back at the same time.
Its a great start though let me know when its revised. Thanks for entering!
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SilentMoonlight
Uh, this is an intersting poem for me. it was wrtten in a place of my life that i clearly was sad and lost. I was an even worse writter when i wrote it. so i been trying edit it. I did some more. went back into it. but from start to end its supose to be a drawn out metaphor. but i edited it some.
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woooooooooooooooooooow ! another great work by you ! thank you very much for this great entry and best wishes in the contest !
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AMAZING work! So morbidlly beautiful. Wonderful job!! thanks for entering and good luck!
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i like it... very relatable... i think everyone feels that to some exstent... it sucks though...dont really know what to say...
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wow i like it.. sad morbid... hurting but true just the way i like then good job yet again keep writing!
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