ants march
carrying their weight
and 20 more
ants march
carrying their weight
and 20 more
Author notes
Very small, but how strong and inspiring
Written December 12th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Allegory, parable, apologue, fairy tale or fable by Yemassee.
627 points, ended May 13, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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You are that ant! Huh, this was for a contest of mine...the title isn't even vaguely familiar. I bet something stupid one. I'm a crappy judge. Another comment below by me that I am tempted to delete. Apparently I've changed over the years.
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congratulations on your honorable mention!! keep writing and have a nice day, -Slick
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Trojan Duck's original comment:
"So what if I want to use 42 syllables? Is the Great Haiku God Basho going to come down from the sky and thwonk me on the noggin?"
Sometimes I'm too funny.
I don't need to use another browser to see who wrote this one, I remember it well. Thanks again for the entry, which also will not be a JFTJOI, but a legit entry.
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ohh i really love this i am a massive fan of insect nature programmes
insects are the best of those wildlife ones i think 
i remember reading some time travel story where some guy went back in time and put an ant that ahd been affected by radiation and had developed lungs or something, anyway he put the ant back in time went back to his own time and found ants ruled the world!
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So what if I want to use 42 syllables? Is the Great Haiku God Basho going to come down from the sky and thwonk me on the noggin?
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De nada meu amigo
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Oooooooh i got it now...heehee..well don't mind me..noone had told me that you could do them with such structure or less words until now 
....so now that explains it! 
moito obrigao for your explanation Mari
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Why is it confusing you Juan? A haiku may be written with less syllables than the 'famous' 5/7/5
As long as you keep it with less than 17,you are fine, actually, the shorter the better
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yeah..though it's not nice to have a picnic and suddenly have red ants bite you... ...anyhow, enjoyable write, with a deep meaning, though Im confused with the structure a bit, since i see either a 2-3-3 word structure or a 2-4-4 syllable...hmmm...I guess it's another form Hope all is goody good with you!
& hugs Mari bonita ~ Juan Pablo
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Leave it to you to humble us all with an ant!!! You are the devine goddess of the 'ku Lovely litle one you have here. Quite a delightful little surprise on a Saturday Monring
me 
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OOOH!!! I like it
And they are strangely inspiring
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Good one, Mari! Crisp, clear image and concept. Amazing little things they are.
~Gen
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Industrious little critters, aren't they? and so well organized. This is a perfect haiku about strength and teamwork. There is harmony here, synchronization.
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Now you're calling us lazy......
This is a real good one. Like the ant, simple yet powerful.
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Isn't it amazing how those little creatures manage to do that? I mean, if I ever pulled a big fat elephant up my back, I'd definately be crushed, and only some ruby looking goo would be stuck on the ground, that's for sure
Wonderful image captured within this 'ku dear mommer but that doesn't really surprise me
Lele -
excellent~
Oh a cute haiku about ants
I love to watch them hold and pack bread crumbs it's like a small army.... & I got up some new ones too
Unique and clever
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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An interesting haiku that shares a bit of "ant lore" as well. I really think we don't write enough about ants. They have such an intriguing world!!! Can you just imagine what giants we are to them? Stu
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Thanks Dear Mari!
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MAri so much in the creepy world what we hardly can understand but in the same time may call ower bewondering in siplicity of being so. Many of us try to understand or to clarify how or why but it isn't important you called up that picture of its simplicity clear as it is. I enjoyed it. Lovely
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Ants are such wonderful little creatures! Glad you appreciate them! I love haikus because they capture the very essence of an image or moment, and that is exactly what you have done here. Excellent work!
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Your ants remind me of the people who carry so much responsibility they become constant workers. That is a sad image, unlike the ants who go about their business each day lifting and carrying. Perhaps the workers smile as they go. Nature has much to show us, great haiku!
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Encore!!!
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Dear Charish, line two means that an ant can carry 20 times her weight
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Great words, Mariza. All I could think of was:
When the ants come marching two by two, hurrah, hurrah....
Cheryl
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Girl! Ain't this the truth! Strength indeed! Once, I saw a small brown ant carrying a big black dead ant. I watched it effortlessly carry the ant right into the ant hole. I was totally amazed. It made me think, if that ant can do it, so can I.
(sings)
"just what makes that little old ant
think he can move a rubber tree plat
anyone knows an ant cant, move a rubber tree plant
but he' got high hopes
he's got high hopes
high apple pie in the sky hopes..."
Couldn't help but sing to ya sister. Excellent!
Renee
Edited on Dec 12, 1:22 p.m. because '
typos. LOL'.
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I don't understand L3, Mari. Can you explain it please? I saw a picture this morning exactly like yours, except it had 1 ant not so many and I was thinking of writing a haiku on it, but I've had a horrible day and couldn't plug my thoughts together to cook up a 'ku...but feeling glad to see yours.
Charishma
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Just like you babe. Not that you are an ant, lol. But you have strength within you that belies your 5 foot 2 inch foot frame. We'll be each other's strength. The snall, but strong willed ant and the dumb but loving grasshopper.
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it make me think of La Fontaine's fable and how it can be in haikus...
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Aww those ants are so cute!! Poor things get squished everyday...
Nice haiku. I agree, here strength is quite something.. probably more than mine Just like a little fmaily gathering
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