Have you seen the passion,
in an electric sky?
Can you see the rainbow,
before the clouds began to cry?
Ever seen the fear,
in a young child's eyes?
Diseased by the blood,
knows he's gonna die.
Ain't much left,
of the Old Man's ways.
We all have,
the same price to pay.
Should have listened,
should have obeyed-
We got caught in,
a Roll in the Haze...
Can you see the eagle,
Never wanting to fly?
Not proud of anything,
do we have to ask why?
The Heavens are waiting-
For a change in our cries.
But are we really ready?
To be lifted so high.
Ain't much left,
of the Old Man's ways.
We all have,
the same price to pay.
Should have listened,
should have obeyed-
We got caught in,
a Roll in the Haze...
Author notes
In memory of my cousin Al
another victim of AIDS
peace brother
Written December 12th, 2005
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This is phenomenal! From beginning to end the format is flawless and the emotion really takes you by storm. What a wonderfully penned tribute. May the light meet your cousin and embrace him eternally upon his journey through the heavens. Peace, Blessings and Love to you always. Gypsy
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My sympathy
On a serious note......your writing for the victims of aids....is very touching....and I hear ya message loud and clear.....I will add your cousin Al'in my prayers tonight....and for the many other people who live life and die....from this horrid sickness....Amen....
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Malabu -
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Ummmm Mudds dude...this is outstanding......a rhyming muddy.....wow......LOL.....this is absolutely beautiful....sounds like my New York slang talk.....but the message.....and your music to this poem.....just makes me want to not give you a clappie guy........cause You get so many...
......but Im weak and I just got to do this.....mind you mudds dude.......I give you this under duress....LOL.....but hey.....you got it dude.....the words....the metaphor and the music.......beautiful write....man.....
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Malabu -
6The mind of sinful man is death,
but the mind controlled by the Spirit is life and peace;
the sins of society comes in the form of pleasure at any cost these days, even in his death he held onto his spirit. This was personal to me as Al's wife had cheated on him and contracted HIV. It was her sin that was talked about in the poem. He has two children and both were negative, and his wife was merely a carrier, as she still has HIV. I know Al is at peace, for he was a lover of life and all it brought his way, even days before his death. I suppose the scripture spoke to me, without this explaination, I could see where it may be difficult to see.
Peace Muddy
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This is beautiful....sorry for your loss.
I've read this a few times, and I will have to read it at least once more...I am having a problem connecting it to the scripture...but I have also had lots of problem comprehending with my headaches...give me time, if it's there, I'm sure I"ll see it...Thank you for entering.
Sam
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This is a beautiful and heartfelt poem, with great lines, specially in the first two. Very well done, thank you SO much for sharing!
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Beautiful
Ohh very nice indeed love the line "can you see the rainbow before the clouds begin to cry" beautiful.. well done and good luck -
Beautiful
This is beautiful. I love it. Reminds me of a few of my poems. But it's wonderful. Good job! -
Very profound use of metaphor, even in the title. I dig this deeply.
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In the end, when we stand before the Lord, our fancy stuff and our "coolness" will not matter much then. We truly all do have the same price to pay, and it will not be cheap.
~Lyrical
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