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Perfection

Perfection
piercing her skin
leaving its mark in the form of scars

slice her
stab her
torture her

Kill her slowly
kill her roughly
kill her with all you have

watch her bleed
watch her strengthen
watch her beat you

Perfection
lying next to her
bleeding on her pillow

she killed it
she stabbed it
she bludgeoned it

It hurt her
she couldn't let it hurt her
not anymore

The more it taunted
the more she hated
imagining the moment in her head

Perfection
lying next to her on the bed
she killed it

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Written December 11th, 2005

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  • Volst Conundrum
    December 31, 2005
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    a good thought put..perfection..it does kill existence..if that is what u mean here..pls forgive me sresswed mind...gr88 work as usual....good strcuture

  • bleedingarms
    December 31, 2005
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    Thank you!


  • sweetkissofdeath
    December 30, 2005
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    Great

    Very good. Fairwell and Goodnight.

  • -Lost Words-
    December 30, 2005
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    Cool ^^

    I like this poem... I don't know how you call it in english, but I like the

    slice her
    stab her
    torture her

    Don't know how to explain, but I love it