I am ruin and destruction
hidden behind a friendly smile .
All I touch rots and fades away.
I am dead inside,
incapable of anything good.
What may seem good
is surly an illusion.
I am sorrow,
it radiates out of my pores
and infects those around me.
I am a torrent of despair,
it flows through my veins
like a rapid river,drowning .
I am anger and rage,
a black soul trapped within flesh
awaiting its departure.
In a list
A contest entry
- How Do You See Yourself by Velvet Rose Petals.
1050 points, ended October 27, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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very good...really enjoyed this
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WOW.. umm way to leave me breathless. For someone who says they aren;t good and they dont bring good to this world, i think you just proved yourself wrong.
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Again I am amazed by the mastery in which you write! This was haunting...dark...yet so beautiful. This was written very well, and it truely is a work of art. Great job!
~W.W~
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Again I thank you, I do believe that this is one of my favorite writes . I am glad that you like it ~Bret~
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it reminded me of satan someone with no soul and incapable of love it was a very dark and and haunting a great write spine chilling
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beautiful! This was deep and dark. Truly and excellent write
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Thank you very much, I am glad you enjoyed it ~Bret~
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Picture and words
give a heart pulling
feel, hurt and pain
sadness and sorrow
These are just a few
that I have picked up
on here in your wonderful
work of poetry.
Riftkin
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This is a man who is fraught with anxiousness and cannot see the light, but if you lookup, through the clouds is always a tinge of silver, I promise, I've been there. Love, C
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this is very impressive... i love it. deep, dark, depressing... my favorite D's. Lol! Plus you wrote it the day after my 15th birthday. kewl huh?
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This was really good..The imagery was amazing and the flow of your words just took me into your poem.. great write..
Peace to you,
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Oh. This is a very sad little poem that you have going on here. It sounds like you're having a rough go at life right now and struggle with your days. It's always hard to go through things like this but I think most of us go through it at least once in our lives. It probably helps us grow as a person though, if we can get through it. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself.
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Well, then I guess I have been doing alot of growing over the years, besides just aging . Thank you for taking time out of your day to stop by and have a look at my work, it is much appreciated . ~Bret~
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wow
the picture this paints in my mind is some what scarry, this is really great though -
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Well , if the picture it painted was dark and somewhat tormented, then it has done its job well. Thank you kindly for taking the time to read my work ~Bret~
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This is quite the dark poem... very well written - you have penned a good piece here!
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Thank you kindly ~Bret~
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hoodwinked
Wow. These feelings are so deep and personal. All of your work is so deeply saddening and I pray you are ok. Excellent as always
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