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Breathing In Breathing Out You*

You haunt my dreams at night
I'm breathing in breathing out you
I exhale and you are forgotten
Then that Saintly night embosses upon me
Your forgotten memory

You haunt my dreams at night
I'm breathing in breathing out you
In one moment or twenty I breathe you in
A dark figure taking light
Standing by me reminding me
Of a time needing to be forgotten
What does it take? Two, three days to exhale?

You haunt my dreams at night
I'm breathing in breathing out you
I don't even notice by the time it's done
Breathing out
Evey cell of your proverbial Adonis
I close my eyes to
Pay no heed to
And then in one moment
You


You haunt my dreams at night
I'm breathing in breathing out you
A dream; you are here
Not soon enough will you be gone
An endless pendulum on which i am sitting
Waiting forever and swinging

Author notes

i call this a bridge to current times. this was actually written befor "Are you Ready" just forgot to add it. This is my 8th instalment of the asshole chronicles. This is an  unfortunate true stroy of how every time i forget Asshole and move on; I end up having a dream and then he wont get out of my head.
AC9
Written December 10th, 2005

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  • robert bolin
    December 10, 2005
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    I agree you did a brilliant job on penning this poem the images
    Are awsome and your emotions ties it all together again thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work..


  • December 10, 2005
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    i really like this poem weldone


  • December 10, 2005
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    You did an outstanding job with this piece. I thought it was a very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing. Happy Holidays.

  • Heath94
    December 10, 2005
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    Excellent. I've had moments like this; you want to forget someone but they pop up here or there and it makes everything so difficult all over again. You're a very talented writer, and I loved every bit of this. Keep it up!

  • TooRainbow silver member
    December 10, 2005
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    Very nice. This has sort of a pleasurable anguish to its tone. "Breathing in and breathing out You" what a masterful line. Really nice job! Thanks for featuring!
    Sheryl

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