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Variegated Christmas

Uncertain twinkling stars conceal urgent fireworks.

Christmas night…
Skies colored with variegated light.

Hidden feelings.

This parade outside
fails to match the sight
behind my eyes now open wide.

Trembling voices .

Christmas night…
Songs of bells
and songs of joy
aspire for dream of sweet delight.

Smell of gunpowder.

My cold,
cold window reflects
beginning of startling hues from skies
turned bright with wounds of void beguiling.

Bubbles and babbles.

Sound of crystal glasses
brimming with sweet bubbles
distant voices imploring their own wishes,

repeat,recite, refrain in vain ,
please deliver us from troubles.

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Written December 10th, 2005

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  • Dobar Dan
    May 2, 2007

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    Bittersweet I would say

    Hi Sonja - Kako si - just reading your "poets page" has taken a lots if time - still haven't finished - I am finding it very very interesting - you are so talented Sonja - your career and writing books and poetry must take a lot of your time. This poem is bittersweet - the smell of gunpowder the sound of gunfire on the day we celebrate the birth of our Prince of Peace - an oxymoron - the way you put this poem together is great - the flow is beautiful - the rhyme is great too - I have a poem on here "What Christmas Is Not" - I can imagine the thoughts going through your minds as you touch your crystal glasses together as the sounds of war resound. Love the last line - a prayer from the heart - "many are the afflictions of the righteous but the Lord has delivered us from them all" Bless God Sonja as I'm sure you do -> Josip <- (Dobar Dan)


    • Sonja
      May 6, 2007
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      Thanks Josip for your reading comment and applause. Yes, my writing takes me a lot of time but I am doing it with a joy. Most of people can't realize how it looks like under the smell of gun powder.


  • Sonja
    December 19, 2005
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    If you like it, you are free to use it.


  • Iohagh
    December 19, 2005
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    I'll take this as a birthday poem since I was born on the 25th of December. LOL. Ciao.


  • Sonja
    December 16, 2005
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    Thank you Carol for you deep and detailed review. also, very precious to me.
    ~Sonja~


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    December 15, 2005
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    This is a poem that should be read over and over and shared. those of us who have lived sheltered lives, have no idea of the angst that can happen and yet there be joy!!!!

  • James 007
    December 11, 2005
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    Oh my, what a poem, what a feelings. I read all coments above and agree that it is old-fashioned. I found a strenght of William Blake and beauty of James Joyce verses. This is a very special poetry. Worth to read it and to think a lot about all meanings. Good luck.

  • Sonja
    December 11, 2005
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    Dear Elizabeth, my poetry is different and depands of situation and my feelings. Christmas is a very special time, and my intention was to make it old-fashioned. shewolfnative asked for something different, and here we are...
    Thank you for your time to read my poetry, for your precious review and for applause.
    ~Sonja~

  • Sonja
    December 11, 2005
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    Janice, I agree with you about Jesus, but do we really need to think about our friends and other people only a few days in the year?
    ~Sonja~
    Edited on Dec 12, 1:00 because ''.

  • Sonja
    December 11, 2005
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    Thank you ecrivian01. I am glad you like it. It wasn't only for contests, but this contest made some special click for this kind of poetry.
    ~Sonja~

  • Sonja
    December 11, 2005
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    Thank you Abigail for your very precious comment. You are right because you saw the real meaning of my verses.
    ~Sonja~

  • buffytheparrotslaye
    December 11, 2005
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    Inspirational!

    What a lovely tribute to the Season.Your poem puts back the joy and hope and the imagery evokes the senses of sounds and colours.Lovely sweet flow,the tinkling of the bells and warmth of the tree.This has a nice old fashioned feel about it.Send it inside all your Christmas cards to lighten and gladden the heart.Thank you for sharing this inspirational piece with us.Elizabeth

  • ecrivain01
    December 11, 2005
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    There are some awkward lines, of course, but all in all, this is a very pleasant write. It is really an old-fashioned poem, the way it reads, and I hope you keep writing more like it. Good luck with your writing.

  • heart on sleeve
    December 11, 2005
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    great poem and i belive we should think of others and be happy all year not just because it's christmas, this poem is like the kind you would read in a old fashioned poetry book so good it makes you cry, you should think about geeting your work published lol abigailxx


  • Janice M Pickett
    December 10, 2005
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    Yes, I have spent many chistmasses listening to the distant sound of guns firing. However we never let it bring us down from the joys of christmas. Christmas is a spiritual time of hope and longing. IT brings with it anticipation for the future. We should never let go of the promise within the message. WE ARE SAVED because of Jesus. WE ARE SAVED because of a special blessing sent from the highest level, our creator.
    So let the guns fire and the ammo explode through the sky. Nothing should get us down on Christmas Day.
    Hugs
    Jan
    Edited on Dec 10, 4:24 p.m. because ''.

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