Sadness,
desperately wanting
a better moment,
lost inside empty existence,
miserably.
Author notes
This was written for a poetry assignment in my ninth grade English class. "Write a short poem that's to-the-point about a feeling. Be general with details, but capture that specific emotion in words." (The form is a Modern Cinquain.)
Written February 4th, 2005
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Well this was definitely to the point! A better definition of sadness I don't think I'll find anywhere else. Beautiful write
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INTRIGUING!
I find it amazing that some artists can create various moods with such a short poem and you are one of those writers with such an incredible ability. I absolutely love the assignment I may even try it. This is a tremendously great choreography of words. I applaud your expertise and talent. BRAVO!!!
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You have captured what I have felt many times- well done and sounds straight from the heart- for you to be able to write so well under the pressure and mere cue of 'assignment' is impressive. I hope you got a good grade! Duana
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this is written very well, and says alot for such few words. keep writing, and take care
Stephanie ♥
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It really does capture that universal feeling- Im sad, alone, don't want to face the reasons. But you're right, we're not alone Thanks for the explanation, very interesting.
KW~
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I really love this, so short but impacts me all the same. Great write.
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i love it
so much emotion in such a small peice
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wow
alot of meaning in little poem...I like it.
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This expresses sadness so well, really conveys the harsh emptiness that comes with the emotion. Brilliant
xXxPurexXx
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This certainly sums up sadness cogently and most succinctly, no question! Very nicely and very deftly done short poem, indeed! bravo... bravo...
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Sadness comes from trying to fill your existence with things that don’t matter you are not alone inside you is a soul screaming out to you to see the beauty which is a simple shadow.
Love this poem, makes you think.
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I can efinately relate to these emotions, as have found myself in these states more often than not. It's hard to know what to do with yourself when nothing seems to go right and you hate life more than anything else. Well wrote. Always here if you need a chat
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Highly philosophical and very neatly presented. Great write dear. I love this poem. Each Word expresses a great deal of impression.
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6th time ive read it
i love this poem, it explains alot of detail and sadness adn depression. keep up ur writing
Blessed Be
Lady Wolfie.
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I loved it!!! Your a GREAT writer! Keep it up!
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this is cool
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each line appends to the last subject
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wonderful piece. I love how you used the style to form this piece. I can definitely relate. great job
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Awesome
I loved it...saying so much with so little
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its great love it
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Short
This is the way you feel when your sad but trully i dislike it when people get sad because they make the world sad!!But this is a good poem! -
Great
In crispy words excellently told.. Keep it up.May God Bless you. -
Short and to the Point
SO little of words and so much said in those words.As we stand here each and everyday with this sadness this pain this horror and wait for that one moment in time when we take our stand and grab hold of the dream we was chasing.We all hope that the grass is greener on the other side.
GREAT WRITE!!!!
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I guess it is simply just like you wrote it. Know how you feel.
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Cool Poem
Short but very meaningful. Good work! I wish you well and God Bless. Lisa
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I like it. I like how you wrote it as a general feeling instead of a personal feeling, it helps to relate better.
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Sadness
Be if from having done something you reget or because of deprssion can be very painful.. the beauty is that one can write about it
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i like it, its not too much but just enough. good job.
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