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a compromise




i won't hold
your hand
while you piss

but i'll
promise you
this:

we'll take after
the sun and
the moon

and do the
eclipse

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Written December 9th, 2005

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  • apples fell
    June 11, 2008
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    Wait wrong contest. I won that one...LOL.
    I'm thinking of something else.
    Retard I am...


    • lively banter
      June 11, 2008
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      It was rigged because you won, I knew it!!!


      • apples fell
        June 11, 2008
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        LOL. I truly wish...Frankly I'm shocked I stood a chance at all. Maybe she accidentally put me for the gold...



  • apples fell
    June 11, 2008

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    LOL. I want to do a dance now.
    This was in "the new elitists" contest...
    That was rigged of course but this poem is fucking brilliant. Clear and without flowery bits.

    I love your voice. So crisp and full.
    Full...LOL.


  • White Witch
    March 16, 2006
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    ohhhhhh...... thats absolutly brilliant.
    I love it


  • Damaged-Rose
    February 23, 2006
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    ummm...ok. That is different. What does holding someones hand while they piss, have anything to do with sex? lol! Nice poem.


  • LyricistFor TheMute
    February 23, 2006
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    HAHAHA!!! Catchy and funny and even romantic in a way. i would applaud it a billion times if i could.


  • Blissful Melody
    February 23, 2006
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    Confused? Shocked? Trying to figure out why it's in not in the adult section? which one am I really feeling? oh, all of them! Dude, no offense, but I have seen better. To shocked & confused to say more.

  • UrFairyPrincess
    February 23, 2006
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    short..cute..actually kinda humorous..nice job..

  • ecrivain01
    February 13, 2006
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    Your cheering section has said everything that I could possibly think of to say, so I'll just go with them. Great poem.

  • blueeyestexas
    December 18, 2005
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    Wonderful!! I hope you get in!!

    So short and bold. And, I enjoyed the subtle rhyme...

    what a talent!

    Luv you lots!

    K


  • Ishtar
    December 12, 2005
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    A metaphorical poem to sex. You know I'm right so don't deny it and give me the shit about double meanings.

    Love you
    -Reni


  • onerios13
    December 11, 2005
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    LOL...I have to agreew ith Rainbow...this WAS vastly entertaining and cheeky! It's not what I would consider exquisite and mind-blowing poetry, to be sure, but damn, it still does the job...lol. How stinkin' cute...


  • December 11, 2005
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    Entertaining

    ~-~-~ LOL I love this piece, it makes me laugh, its funny how it can still be funny and serious at the same time. For some weird reason, as I was reading I pictured an ex of mine and myself in bathroom stall. LOL I wonder what the inspiration for this was? Well, I look forward to seeing more of your ultra-fabulous work very soon, thank you dahling. ~-~-~

    Love and hope,
    Adair A.K.A. "Queen of Rainbow Land"

  • ForbiddenFallacy
    December 11, 2005
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    Great!

    Very nice! I like the subtlty of all of it!


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    December 11, 2005
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    lol!!! Brilliant!!! Hope all is well with you. How have you been doing Kevin?

    Love and light,
    Lencio


  • tieed
    December 10, 2005
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    Haha very different. I love the first line, wtf, it great. Thats like the edge of dependency and laziness, having someone else hold your dick. XD I also enjoyed the subtle ryhme and formatting, very good.


  • Paint Me Beautiful
    December 10, 2005
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    this is brilliant once again, you rock my socks with ur beautiful poetry!


  • Dienush
    December 10, 2005
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    I like the nice subtle rhyme used in this. Also, the first image coming as a shock makes the poem much more powerful than usual. I like this - indeed somewhat of a compromise, sounds like a deep promise to a loved one, that kind of promise that can't be easily forgotten. This is short and that kind of thing that makes you think for a long time... You expressed profound thoughts and strong emotion in usual words.

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