*i will spend eternity
here
in hell
a world of hatred
and war...
nepotism and destruction
where everyone is oblivious
but me
they cant see the eternal sadness and depression they've been caught in
inescapable
i am trapped
i may get away, only for a moment,
and in that moment is a lifetime of happiness compared to what i face here
and then the demons of the underworld drag me
back down
to the depths of eternal damnation*
Author notes
anger
Written December 9th, 2005
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free verse i take it?? very dark poetry....and very good
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in the past i would say that i can relate to this poem. but now, i can not. though i must say this is a very powerful write. it seems as though you may be reflecting your life...n e way great write!
~mandy~ -
this is fuckin awesome good job
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great job
this poem was awesome the view expressed really touched my soul great job -
This is really good, i really loved the way you described hell, it gave the reader a great image(well not great but very clear)...you did a wonderful job with this write, keep up the great work, and good luck in our contest!
xoxo Niccy xoxo -
i like it and i like the style you have put it in. quite unique i mush say. it sucks to know if you ever escape from the darkness you will only be there for a while till you return to hell
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I would say that this was more about hurt or depression than anger, but that's just my opinion. This was pretty good. It didn't flow too well but I can make do. I still liked the point of it. Keep up the good work and thanks for entering our contest!
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Deep
Very heavy stuff.. its a topic i avoid but i do like the way your words are so powerfull. They make you want to read it twice
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