Dreams the sleeping sun
moons companionship
after the nightfall
Author notes
Night is but a dream that Sun have 
Written December 9th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- haiku to friends - part 4 - by Mari Goes.
300 points, ended December 12, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Itlooks like 5/5/5 but oh well
Who is counting?...It is beautiful.
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great haiku
aah I like this short and great! -
It is because i tried to make the 5/7/5 metrical rule
Although I think that
"sleeping sun
dreams of the moon
after nightfall"
is now your Poem, you should post it so I can applaud
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I love the imagery you have here. The sun dreaming of the moon is lovely! While she reflects his light, he sees her shine in his dream
You could tweak this a bit.
sleeping sun
dreams of the moon
after nightfall
just an idea Thanks Joćo for this lovely read!
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