I am proud to be an American,
a member of this great nation.
I am ashamed of our society,
disrespecting God's creation.
I am grateful for my freedom,
and those who made the pact.
I am fearful it's just rhetoric,
with laws like the patriot act.
I am awed by our generosity,
reaching out to those in need.
I am appalled when the motive
appears to be underlying greed.
I'm thankful for the opportunity
to pursue my own special dreams.
I am discouraged by the reality
when it's what government deems.
I'm honored for the right to vote,
to participate in a true democracy.
I am horrified that our process
has turned into a damn hypocrisy.
I am comforted by modern medicine
improving the quality of our lives.
I am disgusted by the availability
and the people for whom it deprives.
I love the United States of America,
extraordinary folks fill our society.
I pray that we can all work together
ending this senseless impropriety.
UNITED WE STAND, DIVIDED WE FALL
Author notes
A World Gone Mad
Written December 9th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Paradox by Jfd.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The United States of America by Chuck Johnson.
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Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Political Poetry by fakeport.
600 points, ended May 16, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A world gone mad by DolphinLass.
660 points, ended July 7, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
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Thanks for your entry in my contest, very well expressed thoughts. I agree greed often gets in the way of common decency and also no-one needing medical attention should suffer because of where they are, status, or financial capacity to pay for treatment, humanity needs to put back the human aspect to life. Good luck
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Great
I like the balanced view given - As a non-American it's easy for me to only look at the negative side of the impact America has made on the world, and ignore the good stuff that makes people like yourself torn between patriotism, and not supporting the governments actions. Democracy in your country has always been a hypocricy in my opinion. Whoever you vote for, the government always gets in... Thanks a lot for your entry, I loved it.
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Congrats!
Congrats on the trophy! Enjoyed your poem which stated the positive and negative of what you feel toward our country. There will always be good and bad people around us, all over this world as well as in this country. As long as we keep pushing and striving for what's right, we can rest easy in knowing we are doing the best we can as a people. Will be reading more of you. Enjoy your work. Be blessed and pen on!--Kel
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Interesting write
Please comment with why you have gotten these opinions? Which events in our history do you use as a basis for your opinion? -
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I think our nation is the best thing going. I also believe that for of the freedoms and liberty a democracy provides, it has inherent falicies. 40% of Americans dont have health insurance. The double standards for the have's and have not's. Democracy fuels competition and inspires greed. I'm just dissappointed that we are such a great nation and we tend to not make the most of it.
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this is a very powerful write. great job on this and there is a lot of truth in this also.. the fact that this great country of ours, is like two sides of a coin. one is the good, the other is the bad, can't have one without the other..
kathy
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nicely penned and you touched upon so many prevalent issues going on in this country....this piece (hopefully) makes the reader think....thanks for entering!
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Different. Critical. Amazing. You certainly don't leave many good points about Americans in this poem and yet I can see that you care about your country and countrymen. The flow was irregular sometimes, but this is a great poem anyway.
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very good
congratulations on an exelent write and a well earned trophy, keep up the good work and thank you for sharing this with us
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Wow...Again I feel I have just read one of the most powerful poems on this site. This is so true, so moving, it really hits close to home. Although I am not American, I can see this in society all around the world. It is stunning how you have managed to capture this with words.
Thanks so much for entering the contest,
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Thank you for the wonderful comments. I could tell that you truly understood the intended message. I hope you have several quality entries. thanks again!
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Very well written, and an excellent subject to express the dichotomies of Virtue and Vice. I feel much the same way about the ideals upon which we were founded and the slow rot that seems to have infected them. My own opinions not withstanding, your opinion is clearly and beautifully expressed and ends as all strong aruements should, with hope for positive resolution. Thank you sharing your poetry, and for entering my contest. Good Luck and keep writing.
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You can trust me, I always keep my word, but a curiosity still remains, an honest answer is expected, how did you come to know? Your reply itself holds the answer, the reason for the degradation of the country. You may come across some people who want to be famous, but others make them famous. Such individuals in act or thought, never have a self, they tell themselves they have been selfish. What is their aim in life? GREATNESS - in other peoples eyes. Fame, admiration, envy - all that which comes from others. Others dictate their convictions, which they do not hold, but are satisfied that the others believe them. Others are his motive power and prime concern. They do not want to be great, but to be thought great. They do not want to work, but to admired as workers. They borrow from others in order to make an impression on others. There's your actual selflessness. It's their ego they betray, but everybody calls them selfish.
Now you may understand why individualism is important, unity is not possible because no person can share his body or soul, and you can call such individualists selfish. Collectivism is for those who aren't competent enough and rely on others to get there their work done, society holds them in high opinion, why, because they are united, they know how to share, isn't something wrong with such a society? -
Thank you for the very nice comments!!! I hope the same is not true in your country. I have never been to INDIA but I my perception would have been that there is a lot more culture. Culture seems to discourage individualism and promote unity. The mighty dollar seems to be at the root of all self-centered social demise.
P.S. I hope I was right about India being your country and it is not necessary to give me fifty points. Take care!!!! -
A very good one indeed, the kind that I wish to read. Your thoughts were what the reality is. Maybe the same can be applicable to my country. You know what, I like playing games, if can identify my country, I will gift you fifty points, this contest is open only for you.
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Your welcome!! I'm getting ready read some of the other entries now that there are several. It appears there will be good diversity in regards to countries. Great contest and thanks again for the nice comments.
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thank-you for entering this is brilliant.
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Thank you for the comments and your appreciation the the message I was trying to convey. When I read the stanza you selected in your message, I actually felt the emotion in it more than when I wrote it. Thanks again!
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Excellent poem! You give the good and the bad aspects of being American. This stanza is perfect:
I'm honored for the ability to vote,
to participate in a true democracy.
I am horrified that our process
has turned into a damn hypocrisy.
Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for the kind and supportive words. Your review was exactly what I was trying to convey. That is not always the strongest part of my writing skills. Thanks again!!!
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Another good one.
Again:
I applaud you.
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