In and out
The blade swings clean
Murder screams
Pictures in my head
Of a bloody romance
That went to far
Biting my nails
I chew to far
Fingertips begin to soar
Love that was once you and me
Now is gone
You threw me around
Like nothing you'd ever seen
Carried me away
And left me
not to be seen
all my sad sorry thoughts
that killed me within
I dream a bloody romance
and you are to begin
blaming all of it on me
It wasn't me that had
anything to do with this
you just made everything
the most bloodiest mess
The breath of life
The breath of death
kissed me tonight
and out went the lights
Author notes
Written December 9th, 2005
A contest entry
- Darkness Within by Elven Rajamala.
300 points, ended December 18, 2005, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pure Hatred, Gore, Terror, And Horror by Chemicals.
550 points, ended March 11, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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what a bloody romance,,, i realy like 8 kid./
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Great job on this!
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Oh haha, i think i sent my reply to my own comments? I am new here. Getting used to things slowly but surely. And it's way more confusing on a phone.0.o. But yea at this moment i am trying to read more of your amazing work. Thanx for feeding my mind. Its been hungry for some great work.
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I love the imagery, and i adore your style. It reminds of a stage in my life and i can relate to every word. You are an amazing writer and i love the fact that you share so much of yourself.
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This poem was pretty good. It was very simple and straight to the point but it still fell into place. I think there are some parts that need revision and grammar worked on. I like were it is going, but I am sure you could work on it some more. Keep up the great writing and good luck in the contest.
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Awsome
Wow this was breathtaking, I liked this poem a lot and it truly was sad. This was an amazing write and I wish you luck in the contest.
~E. Rajamala aka Shadow Child~
Edited on Dec 12, 9:34 p.m. because ''.
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