Vaccumed ,he walks away with demented thoughts of peace
Its call of death greeted by an empty soul
Helpless? he succumbs quietely,proudly? or wet eyed, dry lipped ?
Agonised by thoughtless ghosts,unfinished jobs,undone justice?
....explodes his heart proudly into bloody fireworks of warm flesh
To leave behind a trail of unwanted ,undesired,uncomprehended ,froth of tiny red beads ,
One click causes so many other dominoes to crash,beautifully
Crumbling into cutup bits of unfinished lives......to be forgotten forever!
SUICIDE BOMBER,Unknown,Unwanted,but he Awes me
All ,All swept away....by todays news into tommorows nothingness
Was!!!a heartless demented mind ,a masterful stroke of maniac
Was!!!Treacherous leadersbrainchild!thousands blown to dust!Swept away?.. by todays news into tomorrows nothingness....
Author notes
Written December 9th, 2005
A contest entry
- Poets Of Bohemia Contest by kailum.
300 points, ended May 23, 2006, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite-palooza by swim.x.
1650 points, ended October 6, 2008, 100 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was such a thoughtful poem. I am in awe of your ease to put massive thoughts, ideas and ... things! into such beautiful words.
Congratulations.
Goodluck in the contest.
Chin up,
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Oh yes you are so right, terrible things that are happening in the world, families destroyed, childrren left as orphans, , this poem is full of emotion and I liked it very much, I wish you all the best.
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Thank you .........
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5 Stars *****
Helloji
, sorry to be late to comment on this one!!
I agree with "Shaitus"'s reply above, such people give more importance to their principles then their life, taking personally, everyone(usually) has a specific thing/being, which/who, for them, is more important than life...
I think i have read few works from you before too, but this is one of your finest works...your diction was simply superb, and every word made more sense into the concept, its not because i know you a little personally, but it had a huge emotional impact on my heart, and i somehow can imagine what you must have had gone through while writing this write... very good write lady
nice write.. good work.. thanks for sharing
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend... just keep it up... your humble little friend....
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... .... - vic ( who else? )
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This was awesome! You expressed what I was looking for so well, I loved this! Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you ,yes,its really terrible ....killing everyone in a flash ,,the dead people are gone but they leave behind lifetimes of regret ,sadness and loss
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'bloody fireworks of flesh' is such a powerful but effective image...
This is such a sad poem... i think it is awful what suicide bombers do - not because they kill themselves but they sepcifically target helpess civilians....
Well written piece
Jess
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A country which incarcerates more of its citizens than any other in history and which kills more of its citizens than anyone else except China and which has some of the highest murder and crime rates in the world and which allows its citizens to go around armed to the teeth and which attacks and invades foreign countries and which declines international jurisdiction and which holds the world record for hypocrisy is to be pitied. However to keep someone in jail for 25 years and THEN kill him in front of a drooling audience of psychopaths seems to be a bit of a new and intriguing development. Why not have executions on the Jerry Springer show?
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thanks a lot for reading and liking
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Im speechless great poem!!
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"Hearts explode proudly into bloody fireworks of flesh"
This poem is so real and full of sadness and tragedy. Th eline above made me stop. This is very potic writing. You spek of truth. It's really dissapointing that the world's going so crazy. Keep up the great work
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I think..He is too concerned about his ideologies.
He values his principles than his life.
But at the same time he is such a fool who cannot understand the value of innocent lives. He is mad by his own thought process. He does not have guilty feeling as he thinks he is doing the right thing.Actually he is reciprocating it as a protest. But I think we cannot love any philosophy that
cannot love the pain of an innocent human being.
If we look back to history there were a lot of people who never valued their lives. Look at Jesus. Look at Socraties.
There are a lot. But they are against hatred.
Here he is just waisting himself with the pains of a lot..just satisfy hisown egos and hisown ideologies..I mean...Such a fool. -
Yes,its true ,i understand that but still can you describe to me how a man can agree to blow himself up?
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I think human philosophy changes with age.
Generally youth are more sensitive towards any kind
of injustices. But exploding solutions are to be discouraged.
Due to the very fact even innocent and educated men become the
pray of their ideologies. It is not nice to be slave to anything. Even to say to a religion or say to an ideology.
The thought process of a human being should not be foced by his/he surroundings. Then only developments in any direction can happen. Quite often people do cattle walk towards the slaughter homes unknowingly after becoming the slaves of their own religion or theirown ideologies. Let there be discrimination of thoughts. Let those explosion not to be happened again.
All well wishes.
~shaitus.
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Thank you ,yes i think you are right ,i am looking at it again ....take care bye
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ooooh, yeah the title definately caught my eye and the poem wasn't too bad either =) I really like this line "Hearts blow into bloody fireworks of flesh" but I think you could make this just a tad bit more exciting like maybe exploding into bloody fireworks, instead of usuing the word blow try somethin else maybe to give it more kick cuz this line is asking for it
nice poem, I enjoyed reading it.
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Excellent
This is a very powerful write on the sad but realistic society we live in today. You have done an excellent job on this piece. Very good word choices used here. -
Thank You ,I dont know if this makes sense,I just often cant understand how far a human brain can take ,I cant understand how anyone can be a suicide bomber!!!
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Hello Jim,how are you ,i was worried ,is everything ok?thanks this was in my mind for a long time ,just that i get too emotional always and end up writing very mushy mushy ....i think ,take good care ,,,goodbye
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Your poem and imagery has captured a very sad event that repeats all too often with numming effect on the meadia and their followers. Good job Anji!
Your friend,
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EXCELLENTBUTSAD
WoW! What a powerful and very sad poem ..I like the way it is set out and shows the violence vividly and the desperation as well as the arrogance ..Sadly this type of existance is with us and the poet must write about it as you have done...I feel sorry for the poor deluded ones that carry this act out but angry at their masters
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