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I loved you once, in a previous life




I loved you once
in a previous life,
sweet words to soothe my day.

The door closes
as your eyes greet mine,
and there..
i know..     you loved me.

Your arms
gently around my waist,
court me atop winding staircase pedals
as your lips
gently greet mine.
Through narrow walls
a door silently awaits.

Together, we enter.

Bright sunshine fills the room;
sheer flowing in the breeze,
white satin, caressing.


           ~~

I loved you once,
in a previous life....

a staircase stares to remember.


           ~~

Satin wind,
sunshine beams,
echoes roaring in my ears.

Children down the window
sill, cheerfully playing...
unaware...

as we once were...
children playing,      
unaware.


............I love that sound~
                        { Happiness. }


          ~~

. . . I loved you once. . .


            in a previous life.












Author notes

this poem is based on a fantasy about my marriage.
my xhusband was an alcholic and really bad physical abuser,
and cheater. you name it. this is just a fantasy of what i
would have loved to remember from another life of what should have been. i guess it's only in fairy tales though.
Written December 9th, 2005

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  • Thedragonisgone
    October 23, 2006
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    Oh sweety, don't give up on that dream. Please don't. I wasn't sure if love would ever find me again. It took me three long years of hard work to get to the place where I could accept love again.
    I appreciate the honor of reading your work. I think I've read your work before, but I''m not sure.
    Thank you for entering.


  • The Pasture
    August 18, 2006
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    Excellent

    i like it a lot


  • Just Myself
    July 7, 2006
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    nice job

    awsome write keep up the work


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 30, 2006
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    Excellent

    WoW one of your best I have read. Love the immagery within the meaning. Great feel in the words, All Excellent.

    I love that sound~
    Happiness.

    I loved you once,
    in a previous life.


  • Angel Falls
    June 24, 2006
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    This is beautiful. I loved it. I look forward to reading somemore of your work.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 7, 2006
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    this could be taken one of two ways. i really like the way in which you wrote this wonderful and heartfelt piece. it does seem that we have much in common as you said. viyanna r langager


  • loneArt
    January 11, 2006
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    Excellent write

    beautiful. great imagery. i could see the stairs and the room with the brighly lit window. i almost heard the children laugh. i wish i could write love this well, maybe someday. anyhow, great poem.

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