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Boy In Black

Every day
same place,
 same time.
The boy in black waits outside.

Every day
same place,
 same time.

His hands in his pockets,
trying to keep warm from the cool December air.

He never wears a jacket,
he probably would never consider covering up his favorite band shirt.

Flaming red hair covers his eyes.

The boy in black sits and waits.

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Written December 8th, 2005

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  • Ninque-Aiwe
    October 1, 2007
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    it's steeeeeeve!


  • something vague
    December 23, 2006

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    This is amazing. Absolutely amazing. It's an incredible character study of someone.... I don't know, it's just such a cool observation piece. Ah, I really love it. I'm impressed. :]


  • nom de guerre
    December 17, 2006
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    I like it...not the typical stuff. I like that you've observed this waiting and have hypothesized on what he might or might not be willing to do. I guess it is an interesting mystery as to what his purpose might be. He waits...sort of existential.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 14, 2006
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    Great poem

    Loved this. Just loved it. The imagery was great. The writing brilliant. And it just summed up everything that a boy is.

    I mean. some of them walk around as if it is the middle of summer, with short sleeves no jacket, and it is the middle of winter. Your so right about that.

    Lolol Reminds me a lot of when I was in school. We had many boys in black. Who did what this poem is talking about. Great writing.

  • Ninque-Aiwe
    February 8, 2006
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    Candy cane? No, no, no. Valentines!

  • Ninque-Aiwe
    December 13, 2005
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    Omnisity. Maybe we should send him a candy cane.
    "If you think someone needs a friend, be one." xD - a bit blaring, isn't it?

    I don't think I've ever seen this kid - but I get a really good picture of what he's like. awesome job.


  • The Existentialist
    December 12, 2005
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    i like this. its kind of mysterious in a way that you'rw not sure what the hell its getting at and it makes you get drawn to it even more. idk. great job though

  • Jumbie
    December 8, 2005
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    Thanks very much for the comment. And yes it does relate to my own life, I see the boy that I described every day at school, yet I don't know his name.

    -Shannon

  • Amanroth
    December 8, 2005
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    i like this one. i'm wondering if it relates to anything in your own life, or if you just thought it up. great imagery for such a short poem, and yet the guy's face is anonymous.

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