rain drips
and the concrete slips
as I
sway my hips
passed your
vacant lips,
and that
absent smile
used to
make me stay a while
but I
live to sigh.
and I'll
never lie...
again.
Author notes
I want to make this a slow, smooth, sweet jazzy song... 2 weeks to finish it, right?
Written December 8th, 2005
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Hey, this was such a sweet piece! I could feel that jazzy dip in your tongue. Kind of sensual, lost in your moment. I read your bio and I think that contest of yours will get plenty of hits. Good luck
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i did love the meter and flow in this one. would make a great jazzy piece.
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Hey this is smith
wow! awsome! it's good to see you're still alive. i haven't heard from you in a while. love you lots.
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Hillary...you're amazing...
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I love you
WOW...I love you so much.You have no idea.Only two more fucking weeks...yeah...now I think I can make it.
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