One life sees her smiling
Lights dancing in her eyes
And her laughter fills the air
As the wind plays with her hair
And it seems she's never known
How not to fly ('Cause she's such a happy girl)
Among the silver stars
Above the moonlit sky
The rain below her far
And the storm clouds so dark are
Never where she goes
She soars so high (Has no care in the world)
But nobody knows
The pain that she's hiding
'Cause she turns up the music
To cover her crying.
All she wants is a shoulder to cry on
Someone who understands
All she needs is someone she can count on
To help her stand again
But all she has
It seems
Is the weight of her world on her back
And where she is
All she sees
Is cold and rain in darkness so black
When all she wants
All she needs
Is love
Love
She wishes she were stronger
That she were without fear
But look into her eyes
'Cause through them her heart cries
Though she wishes it would not
She won't let anyone hear (that frightened little girl)
Hiding in the corner
With her pillow stained with tears
She's lost, she's all alone
She has nowhere to go
She just wants it all to stop
Just don't let anyone hear (her cries must not be heard)
But when nobody's counting
Her tears as they fall
She wonders if life has
A meaning at all.
All she wants is a shoulder to cry on
Someone who understands
All she needs is someone she can count on
To help her stand again
But all she has
It seems
Is the weight of her world on her back
And where she is
All she sees
Is cold and rain in darkness so black
When all she wants
All she needs
Is love
Love
Just reach out your arms
And she'll come out of hiding
Her heart needs your whispers
Her tears need your drying.
All she wants is a shoulder to cry on
Someone who understands
All she needs is someone she can count on
To help her stand again
But all she has
It seems
Is the weight of her world on her back
And where she is
All she sees
Is cold and rain in darkness so black
When all she wants
All she needs
Is love
Love
Give her love
All she wants
All she needs
Is love.
Author notes
okay now that it's DONE... I feel like I was writing it all along for my sister. the major part of it just came to me when she was in my room with me crying... and then she was all better by the time i finished writing it... hmmm... it felt like i knew it was for her all along but i just didn't KNOW that i knew... yeah. ANYWAYS.....
FOR JACKIE.
Written December 8th, 2005
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thanks kasey
that's one of the things I like about songs like this... no matter who it's written for at the time, it feels like it could've been for anyone. Everyone feels like this sometimes... i know it makes me feel better when i hear songs that describe sooo much how i feel, i don't know, just that someone somewhere feels the same way i do. so i figure some people are the same 
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This is beautiful, amazing. Powerful!!! I'm glad you wrote it for your sister, of course I can't say that it doesn't seem the same for me....oooh. I know I shouldn't say it, but all the words you used seemed to describe my predicament, or how I've felt the percentage of my life. I've always had only myself when I cried. My mother usually was either away, or she didn't want there to be anymore fighting and she knew that if she comforted me as I cried it wouldn't recieve a positive reaction.
Oooh..you did such an AMAZING job on this Aleicia. It's great. I hope you can become a singer just so Jackie can hear the words for her on the radio, or on the cd of yours she will buy/get.
There is nothing else to say..besides this is great. Keep it up Aleicia. Work for what you want, you can do it!
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there's a double negetive??? aaah i see what you're talking about, tim.
And it seems she's never known
How not to fly
that's supposed to be like that... like, she's never known how to keep her feet on the ground. she's never known how to be sad. does that help? -
Thank you for pointing out that typo... i'll fix that right off. Thank you so much for your support and your comment.
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Wow...Awesome!This is such a great poem!!You wouldn't believe!I'm glad you got inspired by your sister,cuz that's just cool...
One thing though
"She's all along,should be"She's all alone"...Small typo lol...
Man I love this piece the best:
"Just reach out your arms
And she'll come out of hiding
Her heart needs your whispers
Her tears need your drying."
It's just so great,because somehow we all feel like this..Especially me lol..A LOT...I think it's great wht you did for her.She'll be SOOOO happy to read this...
Stay Strong,
I'm praying for you both(Don't worry,we all have times when we start to doubt)
~diamarie
"Weeping may endure for a night,but joy cometh in the morning" -
awesome! sad and beautifully written...I don't know what it was you were upset about last week, but I hope you're feeling better.
and btw I agree with Tim, for some reason that third stanza stands out to me.
Let me know when it's finished; I'm interested in hearing the song.
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wow... thanks, tim
it's gonna be a song when i'm done. i figured a lot of people feel this way sometimes, the inspiration hit me when i felt that way. thanks again!!
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Wow... amazing job. This was so metaphorical and yet I can tell it is so personal. To me, it seems finished, but to you maybe not. Let me know what you decide to do to it. One thing is the double negative in the first stanza. It wasn't obvious to me that it was a double negative until I read it a couple of times. That can be a little bit confusing so you may want to change that. I love that 3rd stanza where all she wants is someone to love her, but all she can see is the pain and saddness (if I'm interupting it right). Wow... that was my favorite stanza, but all 3 of them are great. Awesome job! Can't wait to see what it's like when you're finished.
--Tim
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