By Chris Crevling
Walking down the street
I feel the blood beneath my feet
Realizing what I've done
But not knowing why
Why did you do this to me
Why did I feel this way
You use to liberate my soul
And make me feel alive
But now with the taste of blood in my mouth
And the tears of pain
I stare into your glazed over eyes
And realize what I've done once again
You where me and I loved you
But you felt differently
You loved him
He is the reason
He is the purpose
He is the oppitamy of this
Why is the only question on my mind
Why is all I know now
I couldn't live without you
I cant live without you
Now with no more worries
I stare down this chamber
Feeling nothing but grief
I look at your bloody corpse once again
And remember your beautiful blond flowing hair
I remember all the laughs
All the problems
And most of all you
Memories, that's all i know
I hear the sirens now
Time for me to go
With one pull of a trigger
I hope my hopes will not linger
When this strikes me
I wont feel again
No more day light
Click
Damn its empty
That last bullet was for me
But I used it on him
I hated him
I hated him for taking you away from me
Now we all had to pay
I wish he had left
Left you alone
Left you for me
So There's nothing more for me to do
But sit here in my cell
Until i can visit you in my dreams
Where everything seems
Better than before
Sleep forever dear
I will love you
Even though you could not love me
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Written December 7th, 2005
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very intresting write, not quiet sure on what to say to it because there are so many diffrent ideas in this poem well done i think i liked this poem alot good luck in the contest
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oh my freakin gosh...I'm with Diamond Lou on this one too....Love this poem as well..I don't know what it is..all your poems are freakin awesome and capture my heart in a totally awesome way! keep up the awesome work!
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sighs Yet another reason why love is bittersweet... more bitter than sweet at times... Wonderful poem, but if I may... erm... point out a few things.
1. "Why did you do this to me
Why did I feel this way"
- that last line seems somehow awkward. Perhaps if you put "do" instead of "did", it would flow a little more?
2. "I cant live without you"
- Grammar... you need to put an apostrophe in between the n and the t (bear with me, I'm a grammar freak).
Beautiful write
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Coconut
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Unrequited love and the crazy emotions it causes...
Well-done and best wishes
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omg.....this kinda makes me wanna call u baby and hold u. o.0 i have a poem kinda like this about him liking another girl. but urs is better!!!!!!
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