as one
poet and poem,
pen and eye; yet only
a fragment of the self falls on
these lines
Author notes
We are our poems; we write what and how we see...
Written December 7th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Del's Contest (Cinquains) by MagicLady.
500 points, ended December 10, 2005, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I bookmarked this piece a million years ago because I loved it so much...and I still do!
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You really found an old one here. I haven't written a cinquin in years! Thank you so much..
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Thank you, dear man for sharing your soul with me too... ~
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Incendiary Fragments
Yes, and the depths
of this gentle soul
retreats and treats
us..
via ink well
so that we too
might share a
sliver of her
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Renee, thank you so much! I kind of like shorter poems, especially the cinquain! Best wishes ~
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OUTSTANDING! So much said with so few lines. CONGRATULATIONS You earned the merit you received with what seems to be very little effort. I love this!
Renee
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Thank you, Lora - I appreciate your kind comment. Best wishes ~
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Congratulations! I can see why this is a winner. It speaks so much truth in just few syllables. Wonderful. God bless, Lora
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Thank you, Dini! ~
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Very Nicely done Nicolette, a truly worthy Winner! ~Dini~
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Thank you, IrishYndina for the very kind words - I so appreciate it! Hope I can produce more "fragments" like these...! ~
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Wow, I'm speechless. I can definitely understand why this piece took the gold
It's so simple yet so eloquent and elegant and true. I love it 
I think I'm going to have to bookmark this for later enjoyment Congrats on winning and keep those "fragments" coming!
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Cheryl, thank you very much for the kind comment. I love writing in this form and when I saw the contest for Del, I knew that my "subject" just had to be something about writing or poetry. Best wishes ~
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Thank you for entering your cinquain in this contest for my friend Del. I know he is in a better place and probably watching over all of us.
You did a wonderful job writing your cinquain. The word count is perfect and you seem to have such a unique voice. I think it is a "phrase" that everyone that writes poetry or stories can identify.
We spill our guts and share some very private things in our poetry, but we are more than just that. Well said.
Cheryl
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I enjoyued this poem alot. It was short but yet it was very profound. I loved it. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Such a profound statement you have made in these few lines. Love it. I will always think that short succinct poems say so much more than long ramblers any day.
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this says it all. you can read a million poems by one author and never know what is truly in that person's heart or mind. sort of like the hand being quicker than the eye.yet our pens still speak volumes more than our voices
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How true this is. We can expose only so much to the world, do we all retain some secrets?
A poem that makes one think about their own secrets, I love it.
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This is an awesome poem. Seriously. I've tried to write something that put across this point but it never came out like this. Applause, definitely.
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That's a very true statement. You are what you write. Great poem!
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This is so different from what I have read of yours, and I'm still in love with your talent!
Simple, but so deep, you write what so many of us feel, but so eloquently.
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I agree. There seem to be a lot of short, yet profound, poetry posted lately. And this is definitely one of them! Each poem may be a fragment of the self, but with a collection of poetry a bigger picture can (hopefully) be seen. By the way, the picture fits the poem great! Thanks for sharing!
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Tonight seems to be the night for simple and incredible poems. I love the picture poem match. Its so interesting. You truly have a talent for writing. Keep on keepin on.
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Thanks, Doc! I too like shorter poems and the cinquain allows for powerful presentation within 5 lines and 22 syllables. I appreciate your kind words, my friend! ~
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Thanks, tote Schnecke for your kind comment. Are you sure about line 2 having 5 syllables..."po-et and poem" - I count that as 4
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Thanks, Vlindertjie - I knew you would relate to this one, my friend. Actually I was working on another poem (with the same theme) but couldn't get it together...so this is a fragment of a fragment, lol!!
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Thanks, bokkie . This is actually only a "fragment" of another poem I am working on - maybe soon I'll get the pieces together!
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Nicolette,
This is an amazing sentiment in such a small package...I'm a sucker for efficient pieces... I love the message that this view or that view of a person is not the person, but only a view of some part of the whole. Brilliant!
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Yeah, Robin...she does have a mean right hook, doesn't she??? 
Ahhh, Nicolette...you've penned my Heart with this one, m'Lady...I've told people before, when you read a poem of mine, even hundreds of them, you still catch only a glimpse of who I am...this is a glorious snapshot of your Heart, my Friend...I adore your cinquains, you know...& perhaps your Muse needs a vacation, considering... Good luck in the contest, dear Lady... Vlindertjie
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and sometimes we see so much more between the lines, if only we really looked .... I love this Nicolette ... wise, thought provoking, beautifully expressed with the perfect picture ... >>> GINA
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This is wonderful nicolette. What I like about this form is that one can say a lot with just a few words. Your cinquain is very clear, yet it's so articulate. Line two has five syllables by the way, thought I should let you know.
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Well, all i can say is, whatever wellspring you drew this out of...keep it and guard it well. this is an elegant expressive exposition. To pen this way is, to me, a marvel. As you seek to express the blended line existing beween writer and tome. Your words ring so true not just for you but, I think, others who stop here to read. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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i knew this one had been on the whiteboard for a while bokkie. poet and poem are ONE in a sense but yes there is so much more left to discover. FABULOUS picture too that amplifies the theme perfectly
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This is so true. After all, we aren't who we'll be the next moment, so how could a poem represent a ll we've ever felt? You write this very naturally. Maybe too naturally
Nice.
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So... if someone ever says to me:
I wonder how it feels to be caught by a tornado, being sucked up into it's mass, then swirl freely to the stars and fall down again...
Or if someone else asks:
Have you any idea how it is to be hit by a hurricane, where your view on the world suddenly is shaken up, and floods rule the sense of your being?
then I guess I simply have to say yes and refer to the poetry you write after your muse returns from a little holiday.
Absolutely stunning!
Leander -
wow..that is ...lol..breathtaking..deep meanings..and so full of spirit..i'm feeling a spirtual awakening..lol..good job..i love it..quite different from the usuaual poems on "fragment"
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Smiles... - thank you, dear Lyrical - but you know when my muse is on holiday I need to fall back on cinquains!!
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Oh my...whenever your muse goes on holiday, she comes back with a powerful punch. You are so right, we are our poems but if our poems were all of us, the books would be so large they would crush the earth! Well done!
~Lyrical
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