The fear inside me will not subside
From you i try to hide
Falling endlessly into a torrent of pain
What more have i got to gain
Hurting others to hide my own insecurities
My blood is bound to have impurities
Whats making me act so insane
A normal life is so hard to sustain
Don't pay the price for my pain i cause you
I loved you and i thought you always knew
Help me now and save me from myself
You will just end up hurting yourself
I want you in my life
I need someone to help me in these days of strife
Is there anyone out there
Who even gives a care
I want you here but i want you far away
For my misdeeds i will soon have to pay
Pay the price for the evil i have shown
The way i turned out i would have never known
Complex is my life and mind
I just want to leave you behind
I want you gone but i want you here
Just always be close but never near
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Written December 7th, 2005
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awesome, i like how you have it continuously rhyming, and yeah i hope you cntinue with this great poetry
also i entered your contest with a pre-write so i couldnt add the "whats hot thingy so i thought id tell you now while i read some of your poetry,it rox
,anyways cya
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very good.. the flow is wonderful and the ryming is just wow. it shows the emotion very well... i would give you a 9.5 out of ten.. one of the best i have ever seen! i can't find anything negative to say! good job and good luck with the contest!
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Great write. You really put a new twist on an old feeling. This is something everyone can relate to so obviously touches every reader but you made this situation just seem so much more than ordinary--considering the extremes you took to admitting the things (or the person) has done. Keep writing and rock on.
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GOOD JOB!!!!! :F
a true love story type poem, very intense and well written, good job..... Your friend,
Angel
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that was great and thanks for your comment on my poem
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this is really intense and i can really relate. good job.
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