He makes my world turn
he is the word beautiful to me
next to him there is no other place i rather be
he is my everything
he shows me that life is worth living
with him love is what i am feeling
he is my love, my friend there is no exact word how feel about him
i want to be with him til the end
he make me, me
he is beautiful he's mine to keep
he is the most beautiful man i know
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Written December 6th, 2005
A contest entry
- Something Beautiful by Holly Ritz.
450 points, ended December 11, 2005, 7 entries
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I really liked the last line, I like hearing men being referred to as beautiful. I think it adds to the writing to put that in and adds a strong finish to a good poem. Nicely done. Thanks for entering and good luck to you!!!
~~Holly -
perfect write
Hey girl,
This brought tears to my eyes good gob on youre write.
This is perfect.
Keep up the good writes.
Lve ya girl. -
WOW. I remember when you first met him. I was meeting jeremiah and you saw sean and said he is so cute. I never knew you guys would go this far. I am so happy for you both.
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Cute poem
Hold onto something that you feel strongly about 
And love is usually that something It is a wonderous feeling, and I always like the tingling waves of electricity of washes over me 
Anywho, back to the poem!
The poem felt like it was made up of the emotions of wanting, love, and compassionate love Nicely done and keep on writing
~Ibar~
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