From the age of nine, I loved you.
I wanted you all my life.
You finally gave me a chance,
You said you wanted me for your wife.
But, then you chose to go away,
After we loved for four years.
We were destiny's prime example,
But now you have granted my fears.
Three years have gone by so quickly,
And I still love you so much.
Every night I long for your kiss,
An every day I long for your touch.
My heart breaks when I think of her,
The one who took my place.
I wonder what she has over me,
Oh, I just want to see the face.
I want to know what she looks like.
I want to know her precious name,
And how she managed to steal you.
I want to meet the one to blame.
She stole my precious diamond.
She took away my pretty jewel.
She ripped away a piece of my heart,
And left me here to play the fool.
Now you serve your country,
Over there in a faraway land.
I guess this makes you a fairy-tale.
I should be the one there holding your hand.
But I guess I have learned my lesson,
Not to give away my heart.
Love has taught me one thing:
Young love is hopeless when it falls apart.
Author notes
I loved Daniel so much. While we were dating, he joined the Marines. I was planning a wedding while he was furthering his training in California. I hadn't seen him for months when he called me one day and told me he loved me but he just couldn't anymore. ten months later he was married....to someone else. we are afraid of the truth,afraid of fortune, afraid of death, and afraid of each other"
Written December 6th, 2005
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Awwwww... this is sooooo sad... This is what I was looking for something real and sad and very emotional and you gave it... And for a rhym poem.. it wasn't bad at all... (if you looked at my update I said that I would be judgeing rhyme poems harder) but you don't have to worry... this was awesome.
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this is very lovely i like it very much is very sad i like the descrption you had use and the word choose u had great job you are doin well very well put
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Darn!
Darn, that dude; darn, done left you
Darn, I don't know what I'd do
If he done that to me, too
I think I would run him through
With the spit on Cat Food grill
It would give to me a thrill
Better than just writing with this quill
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TALENTED!
Loved your poem..It flowed so nicely throughout it entirely..Im so sorry that you had to experience that..Hopefully your heart will heal..at least a little...You have a lot of talent! Keep It Up!
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oh wow. This is trully heartbreakig. Thank you so much for sharing.
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thank you so much Polaja!
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I really like the way this is written . . . I really think that you are a talented author.
*hugs* I'm sorry this happened to you . . . I would tell you that everything will be alright, but I don't know either way. I can only offer you my condolences and hope that you will find someone new to dull the pain.
The only thing in your poem I would change is that you have an 'An' instead of 'And' at the beginning of one of your sentences.
Stay strong and keep writing
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great, fantastic
Oh my gosh.....i can't believe this happened to you...What pain! it really shines out in your work....but i cannot imagine what pain and hurt he caused you. Oh i am so sorry....but your poem is really really good. ahows the emotions
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