Crazy-eyed butterflies
Crazy-Eyed Butterflies burning into flames
crazy with their stupid lies
without no one to blame
No where to run no where to hide
for freaky butterflies
glide their wings across the sunless cloudless skies
Fly to their land of sweet dewberries and light rain fall
Their sun sets high in the sky, but still remains dark below
Crazy-Eyed butterflies burning into flames
crazy with their stupid lies
without no one to blame
They try to let go of what they can not have
yet glide back to it so
they do not care the hurt they feel
as they burn up and go
For though they are crazy these butterflies
continue to love him so
Crazy-Eyed butterflies burning into flames
crazy with their stupid lies
without no one to blame
They glide across the sunless skies
fly to their land of sweet dewberries and light rain fall
Their sun sets high in the sky, but still remains dark below
For these Crazy-Eyed butterflies that are burning into flames
live in the dark for the rest of their lives
and only themselves to blame
Author notes
Written December 6th, 2005
A contest entry
- Inspiration lost in the Dark by Sia.
450 points, ended April 20, 2008, 23 entries
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So powerful and creative,how you use butterflies with this,just so amazing,desire and the pain it gives to us,just so amazing.....
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You know .. I agree with you
"With no one to blame" sounds ALOT better! Thanks for the suggestion! -
This was beautiful you crazy eyed butterfly!
Hahaha.... I love that. So intelliget. The imagery was deep into the ashes of your soul.
Very well done!
Although, and this may be just me, but I don't like "Without no one to blame" Ah... it ruins the flow for me. "Without no one to blame" It kinda sounds slang and there fore it doesn't belong in the context of this poem. I think and this is only a suggestion, that "With no one to blame" sounds better. Do you agree?
"With no one to blame"
Think about it, but you know it takes nothing away from the rest of it. Elegantly written!
Keep them comin!
Edited on Aug 16, 6:27 p.m. because ''. -
This poem holds my attention - the image of a crazy-eyed butterfly, flitting here and there and everywhere, makes you think of what this poem is about - the love for someone who doesn't love you back. Makes you feel crazy-eyed - a perfect metaphor for that feeling
Excellent again, dear.
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This is a nice poem. The descriptions just pulled me in from the very beginning where the first line begins, even the title captured my eye and as I continued on down the poem held a tight grasp onto my interest. The flow of this poem is very well done, it has a nice feeling to it, not blocky or forced in anyway at, words fit together. The language of the poem is very well picked as well, I like how certains words are chosen to describe certain feelings, moments and times, it makes the poem even better. I like how you chose butterrflies as the animal, its a good choice because butterflies are delicate and breakable and also symbolize so much, such as change and death,birth and rebirth. The last thing I spot in the poem that is nice to read is the imagery, I can see and feel everything that you are talking about and it really is an accomplishment if you can get me to see certain things, even with a poem as good as this.
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