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lilac petals stir

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lilac petals stir
the suns healing rays to trap
ladybirds grip the stem

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long remembered sights
Written December 6th, 2005

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  • Leave-Me-Alone
    December 7, 2005
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    &heartsbe good&hearts

    I may not know much but I know this is a beautiful poem. And that my favourite line is the second one which brings me to (personally) think means that all's that is good can lead to things that are bad...I'm not sure if that is what you were going for but I it's what I got. i also think that you eloquent haiku is an open translation of life...

  • Grace Ekaney
    December 6, 2005
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    This is an absolutely beatiful poem, Lomhar! What a great introduction to this site's poetry, I must say. The third line is my favorite, a slight sense of grasping for something that ultimately will never be. Mighty good job!

    Grace