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melody






drowned in heart felt notes

and tainted tea

as I let this melody

pass over me

on pyres, burn my glee

deliver dust un-to the sea








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Written February 5th, 2005

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  • VampireShadow
    February 7

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    wow...amazing. It flows so well...I like how the first line doesn't rhyme, but the rest do. Usually that doesn't work so well...but it definitely did here.

    ~Jess


  • FallingSideways silver member
    December 6, 2005
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    Dark, short, and wow... so much is still conveyed in this gem of brevity from imagery to emotions.
    Well-done
    ~Swt

  • December 5, 2005
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    Oh my. That's just entirely elegant. Bravo, friend.

    D