I have seen you in the night
when the moon refuses light
when the stars grow dim and cold
in the darkness, I behold
as a ghost, a spirit haunting
eyes aglow with evil taunting
hiding, staying out of sight
but I have seen you in the night
I have heard your voice of woe
tempting sounds that rhyme and flow
spoken by a tempest sea
no-one hears the words but me
Raging with a constant beating
waves of doom that keep repeating
camouflaged, so none will know
but I have heard your voice of woe
I have felt your devil's touches
trembled in your deadly clutches
sensed your presence, you are near
dumbstruck, paralyzed with fear
Others, fools, they do not feel
hear nor see...
but you ARE real
not a demon self confined
to a mad and tortured mind
Author notes
Written December 5th, 2005
option 1
A contest entry
- The Contest Dark And Sinister by Violent Serenity.
700 points, ended September 14, 2007, 44 entries
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Excellent write.
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wow
amazing write !
good luck !!
please continue ritin wondeful poerty like this !! -
wow
this is amazing.. its a really good poem!!!!! wonderful job -
an excellent representation of old school terror
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What amazing flow and rhyme!!! Definately amongst the best I've read thus far. Wonderfully clear imagery, lines that trip beautifully off the tongue when read aloud. There's a superb darkness to this, that gave me chills. I especially love the last lines of this, they really bring the poem to a marvelous close. Thank you for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck. -
I love the flow of this, the rhyming is great. It just rolls as you read. A great insight into the workings of a unstable mind, something not easy to do but you have pulled it off very well. The ending is great. Best of luck in my contest and Merry Christmas!
Pink x
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WOW...wonderful.second stanza is the best.good luck in the contest.....ending was great...hehe i love great endings.
kudos,
Hidden
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this was realy dark
but the deamon you wrote about seemed to be in your head
and life you been through
this was a war within yourself
this was great
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Nice job! "Devil, my Devil" great title!
I Loved the way you began this poem "
I have seen you in the night
when the moon refuses light" it was soooooooooo good! excellent work and good luck in my contest!!!
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I just keep being more and more impressed. I'm sure you have been told this before but you have a lot of Poe in your writing style. This is very good. It kind of reads like a mix between a Poe poem and a folk song. I love it.
~Lyrical
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Wonderfully written as always .. flowing like a sweet sea.. waves churning with rhyme..
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Excellent poem. You really got a way with words raker, please god keep writing.
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all i can say is whoa, you are sick, demented, talented and i love it i tell you. i love it.
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Let the demon fly free! 'o'
Love the rhyme scheme Love the flow, Love the subject matter. When I read it It's like I can see it picture it and feel it. I LOVE it. I hope you keep writing.
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