Trying...
Walking down an obscured path
I cannot see the end...
only an observer
others pass me by
I cry...
fall...
but they are faster than me
I cannot keep up
I know nothing but
obsession
the observer holds all my thoughts
but he will not turn my way
I have nothing,
special
I cannot...
nothing I do is enough
there will always be someone better
I wait, knowing...
he should have
only the most deserving ones...
it would be selfish of me
to want a place...
but
I cannot help crying out...
Doubting everything I do now
I cannot look,
another in the eye
all I do is hide...
Too many secrets...
all caged within me
consuming...
never thin enough...
I loathe this reflection...
so tired now...
shaking
bleeding
fearing
TRAPPED
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not really a poem, just thoughts...
Written December 5th, 2005
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Tis a poem. And I love it, and i can relate to parts. And I love yew!!!!! and no i'm not hyper, I'm just free to love once more. i'll explain layter.
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thankyou
hugs yeah...it is i gess..
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This poem is really amazing. I love the way you described it as the observer holds all my thoughts
but he will not turn my way
I have nothing,
special
I cannot...
nothing I do is enough
It is a really brilliant piece.
Insecurity is something I try to overcome dayly, but it is really too hard to do by yourself. Feeling alone and isolated doesnt help me.
xxx Bex -
"others pass me by
I cry...
fall..."
*Sparrow walks up to you, and helps you up*
You may think you fall, but as long as you have true friends, you will never be able to stay down. My wings aren't as powerful as I'd like them to be, but I'll use them to carry you if you ever need a lift.
I liked this poem, though you say it isn't one. The way the thoughts are all chopped up like that, it's really reflective.
Never feel trapped within yourself, bishie boy. You're prettyful. <3 You deserve a place just as much as any other. ^^ -
beautiful and very sad thought track. i love it xxx
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awesome
I like the flow of this poem, it was like a fast moving song that was speeding up and slowing down then speeding up again during certain points. this is the first poem I have read from you and it is really good. keep up the good work! the words you used were amazing, i could tell you carefully picked certain words. i can't wait to read more!
-Tenshi Asakura -
dig it
Feel good about yourelf, no matter what. -
This...is...AMAZING!!!!!! I am so very impressed by how you captured all that emotion. Depressing. So FILLED with depression. And I'm thinking this is about a guy whom you believe you're not good enough for? If so, I can totally relate. You're preaching to the choir. lol Please, continue writing! ^^
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