deserted footpath
traversing the wilderness
weeds grow all around
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taking a new direction!
Written December 5th, 2005
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Thank you so much for your positive remarks on my writings...i try to be original...but sometimes have to stay with the familiar!...thanks again!
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pozo...
For one so young you have an incredibly analytical mind!...very well done...you are highly observant!...i was not aware how relevant this write was to me until you pointed it out! well done! -
Thank you so much...I am overwhelmed by your review of my write...haiku is a poetry form i have only recently become interested in...i do not pretend to be an expert..i simply write what i feel or think...so coming from a person of your calibre is praise indeed...and i am most honoured that you consider my writing worthy of such praise
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OK, this is my analysis- it could be totally wrong
I think it's about having too much choice in life. 'Deserted' means that you are alone and the 'path' symbolises your loneliness. I loved the word 'traversing'- it sounds so beautiful I think the second line was about being free to do whatever you want and your life being quite wild because of it. I liked your use of pollysylabic words in this line. 'Weeds' connotes brokenness, damage to me It is as though you have too much freedom
Keep writing this was a really good, traditional haiku
All the best,
Pozo
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Once again this is well done. thaks for sharing. keep up the excellent work.
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Oh, I'm the first to review! I visualized this very footpath as
I read your well-placed, well-chosen words. I wrote a Haiku I'd
appreciate you have a look at, if you don't mind. I don't think
it's done properly. Anyway, I love yours. Shancy.
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