The end of us
won't be loud
-No booming voice
-No slamming door
The end of us will
be free of screams
and flailing fists
-No final "fuck you"
-No shattering glass
The end of us will
come gentle and hushed,
like that last precious
exhale of a poet on their
death bed.
Just a whisper and then
forever closed eyes.
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Written December 5th, 2005
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this si a wonderfuly wonderful poem almost like a book
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thanks so much.
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thank you great comment.
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Wow
wow...
you had a really deep meaning and displayed it well. Death is gentle on the deathbed. We all lie knowing the end, and our last breathes betray our emotions. You are a really deep person. Also, about the lines "...like that last precious
exhale of a poet on their death bed." Nice imagery. And I liked how you wrote about a person's poetry. I mean, I see life as a whole as poetry... do you? I mean, without the in-between, all us humans seem to do is: be born, exist, and then die." We don't know the before or after, kinda like a poem, just that it is, and we are... existing. Thanks for reminding me. Cha-Cha!
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OMG I love your quote thing btw, that's such a good song!
About this poem, it's funny cause I was in a relationship and I thought about the same thing... it won't end dramatically, it'll end gently. And then that did happen... it's just the drama didn't come until later, internally.
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thanks so much, take care.
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im feeling this piece. the effort you put into it paid off
The end of us will
come gentle and hushed,
like that last precious
exhale of a poet on their
death bed.
this caught my attention, its like you are talking about both the death of the poet and the end of a relationship. the analogy is simple and powerful. good job, really -
wow powerfull write and unbelivable wording in this its really mysterious and it flows well well done and keep up the good work
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