On city streets slick
Water grinds and erods pavement-
Another suburban rainstorm.
crowds clutter;
Umbrellas fly open,
Of course a few people
run through the park with
Newspapers over their heads,
soaking up puddles with expensive dress shoes
and out-dated socks.
Author notes
Written December 5th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- An Invitational Affair by Kendall Campbell.
300 points, ended January 18, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comment under my umbrella
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Hot Dog Yes!!people pay no much for there shoes and no body seems to worry about there socks anymore..
I love the way you view the world in this.
good Job..
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GOOD
This made me laugh I can picture them running. Too bad they still get wet no matter how fast the run.
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I love simple imagery.
"Newspapers over their heads
soaking up puddles with expensive dress shoes
and out-dated socks"
Great choice of words, and I love the obscure wording of the poem. -
Just adorable
What an incredible piece! And it has been seen a lot around here lately as we have had about 2 weeks of solid rain! Keep writing.
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ah thanks so much! that's very sweet!
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this is a beauty indeed, darned girl ..you have such excellent skills in your writes, humor, serious, and down right awesome..keep penning love ya mom..neighbor, friend and (poet I
think..lol) Linda -
I feel this one. Beautiful, you say so much in so short a poem. And you didn't even have to hint at a deeper meaning. I love poems that can go through such a litteral flow and still show people what they really want them to see. UNLESS of course this one is just about the rain...in which case i apologize
. Loved this either way great job keep it up.
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Wow, busy background. Though a short piece it got my mind working, especially the last few lines. There's so many little things we all hide till the shoes come off. Thanks for the entry, take care and God bless.
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the background was nabbed from some homepage- which i cannot recall or find again. you can right click it and share it. so long as you attribute it back to me
glad you enjoyed the write lyricalheritage -
wonderful imagery here. Enjoyable and refreshing, just like suburban rain. The title was enough of a captivation for me but the poem took it higher. Thank you sharing and if I may ask, from where did you get the rain background? Please do share friend
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This paints a picture of a busy city caught in a surprise downpour quite well.. I like it.
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beautiful
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I really liked this poem. It was short, but to the point. I really liked the lines: "soaking up puddles with expensive dress shoes
and out-dated socks" they were a little funny, yet they ring true. Also, really cool background.
great write.... -Amanda
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