Push me and I will fall
It's not like you expect anymore of me.
One hit right into the heart and I shall shatter
like a bullet hitting a mirror.
Amazing how suddenly your life can break down
into little broken fragments of nothingness.
Maybe this was meant to be.
Hell, this could be all a dream.
A wonderful terrible dream...but why?
Why does everything have to be this way?
Why does everything good have to go away?
These questions have to be asked.
The parchment has been burned.
No one will ever know the truth that lies within the ashes.
So we yearn for the answers even more.
Author notes
This may need some work. Thanks for reading. Commented on "cut me" and one of your peices. "bryant"
Written December 4th, 2005
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Thank you for your lovely comment. I greatly appreciate it. You're an excelent writer your self. Thank you again. Keep on writing. SINcerly -Amanda* -
Thank you for your comment. It was nice and I greatly appreciate it. Rock like Fuck! And keep on writing.
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Awesome like whoa
This is really an amazing peice, so many questions to hold the authors intrest, very well done. Your an excelent writer keep it up.
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a good piece
nice piece of work you have here...plenty of questions that hold attention -
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Thank you for your wonderful note. I greatly appreciate it. Even though I didn't place this was still a wonderful contest. Again thank you for the comment and I will be sure to enter in your next contest if I can. Keep on writing. SINcerly -Amanda* -
i reallyt liked this poem and could tell the meaning of it its very heart felt i love it you write fantastically great wreite write on
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Thank you for your lovely comment. I greatly appreciate it. The write did try to portray pain(Don't know if it worked though). I'm glad you enjoyed this write. Thank you again and Keep on writing. SINcerly -Amanda* -
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Thank you for your lovely comment. I greatly appreciate it. It is sad how many of us can relate. I agree with you in that it is comforting to know that the same hurt I am feeling is where I get my ability to write and knowing that there are people out there who understand and feel. Don't worry you weren't rambling. Also I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. Thank you again. SINcerly -Amanda* -
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Thankyou for your wonderful comment. I greatly appreciate it. That does sound like the wrath of God really came down on you. I'm sorry for your loses. I hope things get better for you. Keep on writing. SINcerly -Amanda*
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very nice! i really enjoyed reading this, i dunno why you said it may need more work, it was perfect! i love the questioning, the contemplating and maybe the pain that you portrayed...
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I really liked this one. Whats sad is that so many of us can relate. Ive been sitting here reading poems and I have to say, its the sad ones that often question. Those are the ones that hit home. I find it comforting to know that the same hurt I am feeling is where I get my ability to write. Its also comforting knowing that there are so many people out there who understand and feel. I used to feel so alone in my pain but then I found this site and saw that so many people experience the same kind of thing. Ok now I feel like Im rambling, just wanted to say that this was a great write and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
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Wonderful write, really, and I really felt your pain in this, I will tell you, in the last few years, I felt the wrath of God coming down on me, my Mother died May 2003, my dog passed away April 2004, then my boyfriend walked out July 2004...I felt like everything and anything good in my life was being taken away one by one,,this really speaks to me!
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Nothing wrote with feeling needs work...this is a great piece and you should continue to write more often...get more thoughts out there, itll help you put all your ideas together...just a suggestion...great fucking job
Derek
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Beautiful
Very good write dear. I am at school now...isn't that nifty? lol. Well I enjoyed this poem like I enjoy every other poem you write. You are a good writer dear, keep it up. Love-Candi -
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Thanks for your lovely comment. I greatly apprecaite it. I don't know how to spell yern but I think your spelling of it, yearn, might be right. Thanks for your opinion and your spelling tips. I appreciate it. Thank you for reading. SINcerly -Amanda* -
Thanks Whitley. I never did think that much of Speeding Bullet after I wrote it until I knew people liked it...It may turn out that way with this one as well. Thank you Whitley. Talk to you later Lovely. SINcerly -Amanda*
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I think you have read this to me before. I really like it. ^_^ One of your best in my opinion...Hell, it may even beat Speeding Bullet.
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Wow I really like this, and I have pondered your questions myself. Really great write. Just one thing..yern is yearn isnt it? I'm probably wrong.
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