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The King have arrived

King winter is here with his entire court near,
to celebrate with us this magical time of year

Lady lunas strongest and most magical season
were her charming light making us loose all reason

At night the heaven full of sparkling stars
are you lukcy you might even se the wargod mars

Children playing eagerly in the snow
i want to make anges dont ask me how

I am more romantic than ever before
craving to give and love even more

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Written December 4th, 2005

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  • urbanfaeri
    December 15, 2005
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    two thumbs up

    good flow and i like the rhymes. the imagry is sweet, perfect for a holiday poem good job!

  • sunny day silver member
    December 14, 2005
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    Very nice!!!

    d-amour, This is a very good write, I agree with the above.
    I too noticed the typos that will take away from the character of the poem. It rhymed so well and flowed peacefully. You painted a lovely picture of winter here. After the edits it will really be great!!!! Well done. Love and blessings for you, today and always. Joyce

  • Lost N Alone
    December 13, 2005
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    Hey AP DAD.....love the poem..it rhymes so well...and has a good flow to it...I can see the images in my head...
    Loved it..your are a really good poet...keep it up..
    Ur AP daughter,
    Amanda

  • robert bolin
    December 9, 2005
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    Brilliantly penned the images are amazing the flow is awsome and the words and the images are amazing thank you for entering the contest snd best of luck to you too.

  • Starhiker
    December 7, 2005
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    Very good poem, d-amour, with nice rhymes, and good flow. Loved the imagery in your work! Noticed a few typos though. Second couplet, luna should be Luna, as it's a personification. In third couplet lukcy should be lucky, se should be see, and mars should be Mars (personification again). Fourth couplet i should be I, anges should be angels, and you forgot the apostrophe in don't. Other than that, couplets two to five should have a comma after line one, and all the couplets should have a period ending them... Yeah, I know, I'm nagging.
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