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Can It Be Said #5

“To say 'I love you' one must know first how to say the 'I'.”
~ Ayn Rand



Something profound came to
me as I dreamt whilst being
entwined and embraced by your
body...

Such long unabated passion
came tumbling as the world of
abandonment fell short of
telling what was really needed-

Silence was not of the factor
for this I feel was an emotion
never brung forth before and yet,
although what was hidden is not
found, my senses reel from the
musky scent you've surrounded
me with

This sought out oyster has a
pearl- like no other pearl in the
sea- but the driving need to be caught
was aimlessly netted and now managed
to open just for you...as you and I
lie together in unison bliss

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Written December 4th, 2005

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  • suseann gold member
    September 17, 2007
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    A pearl of importance comes to light in the depths of the murky seas of love in this piece.


  • B Chandler
    February 22, 2006
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    blushes

  • Blac-sol
    February 22, 2006
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    damn! this is too much..the last stansa, the oyster metaphor and the sea, that is powerful.