I see you in the night
I see your blood red eyes
looking at me
with hope
and trust
you think that I can help
you win
win this fight for life
but the truth is I cant even win myself
you pull me under
try to kill me slowly
but then you see
I'm not dying
your heart is just lying
I see your blood red eyes
in the dark
with every little
twitch you make
and every little cry you fake
your a monster
no one loves you
so what am I suppose to do?
you see me
looking at you
you freeze
think for just one second
can I be help to you
or am I just food?
your eyes grow lower
your in for the kill
with your paws up high
and claws out far
you stabb me
but you see no blood
then you think
is she real?
or is she fake?
no one knows
I see your blood red eyes
and every little lie
you have feed to me
so now you see
I am real
but just not to you!!!
~Emily
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Written December 3rd, 2005
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thanx! alot
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This is a good poem. I liked it allot.
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this is crazy but awsome!! i'm adding u to my fav.s!!!
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thanxz! lol!!!!! i jus wrote it when i was in a car at night lookin at the woods~ and i saw blood red eyes blikning and staring at me idk if he was real bbut i saw him!
lol
thanxz -
woah, great imagery. I really liked this poem and I think that you did an excellent job. I really enjoyed this write. good job.
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thanxz yea im tryin to get out of this hole but it jus keeps pullin me back down sooooooo much stress right now its not even funny! i will email u somtime and give u the full info. k lol
~Emily -
My dear child,
There are always ups and downs of our existence, meaning, sometimes, when we are in our bad days, when we are feeling sad and in distress, if we are going to write distressing and sorrowful and dark ones it will tend to draw us more down into the pit of darkness....It does not help at all... And I know, you are trying to conquer that big dark monster that is trying to lure you down into the pit of sorrows! So it will be good that you will try something new, like a poem of hope... I know it will take you some efforts to do it! It is like a medication my dear child! A depress person should not drown into alcohol bec. it is a downer, instead a doctor is going to treat this person with proziac or make them relax with soothing music! So start your journey my dear child, try to write something hopeful and lighter! You can do it! And this is a challenge for you that I am trying to set!
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thanxz! for the comments!
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thanxz mom! yea i jus thought of this when i was in the car and i saw some blood red eyes in the woods so i jus started to write a poem bout it! i hope to write different poems but i love to be a dark poet though! most of the time anyways! lol well love and ill try ( i think)
~Emily -
To try is to succeed!
Oh ok my dear child, I will declare you now as the princess of dark and sad poems! This is written very well and of course, it can inflict emotions of sorrows and sadness on your readers as well.
Do you think it is time to venture into another field of poetry, like starting with light ones.. perhaps in the category of " HOPE " It will be so wonderful to know if you can challenge yourself into this field. I know it will take effort because you are a " dark, angst, sad" poetess, but to be able to express your writings into different areas, it will give you more opportunity to find out that you can do it, you can make it because you are brilliant and gifted and you can tackle anything beyond compare, because you are a winner, you are a champion, and you can prove that to the world!
Try it Emily... perhaps on your next post, a poem with a category "hope".
If you need help, I will help you! My email addy is thequeenofcanmore@hotmail.com
Thank you..
Love and hugs and kisses,
your mommy ninja -
nice poem , emotion and really swesome!
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thanxz i hope so!!!! lol!
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hey this was a mother.fu.cken da.mn good poem...totally kicked my @ss when I read it...wonderful job this was really good love the moral behind it...keep it up...you'll be famouse someday...ttyl Emily
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thanxz! im glad u think its awesome! u r a good poet!!!! really! lol well thanxz alot and u keep writing!
~emily -
I have to say...this is damn good. You are great! This tells a great story, and ....idk....awesome
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lol thanxz alotzz! lol im glad u liked it i was sittin the car sayin it then i couldnt remeber it then i was like oh darn here it is lol well thannxz!!
~Emily -
this is an awesome poem, you are a very good writter this poem kicks fucking bad ass,yo it rox
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