How can you promise me forever?
You know not of what tomorrow brings.
How can you say "I'll never?"
The pain of my heart still rings.
How can you collect all the broken bits,
When they're so distant and isolated?
How can you brighten my souls' chambers that aren't lit,
When all my deepest thoughts are jaded?
How can I feel so much hurt in a momentary flash,
When the healing that I desire is out of reach?
How come I am the target at which I am lashed,
When you're the one who doesn't practice what you preach?
How come I'm not content with my current standings in life,
When I have all that I need?
How can you see what I'm not seeing,
When I'm the one sowing the seed?
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Written December 3rd, 2005
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Wow!!!! That was absolutly a beautiful poem!!!! The flow just rolled off my tongue. And the emotions were sooo heartwrenching, without being overly sappy. Great job writing this!!!! Can't wait to read more!!!!
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Wonderfully written. I could feel your true emotions, and what I love about it was that your poem made me feel the same way as you do. Great, great work. Keep it up. May your life be blessed with the gifts of God.
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Such profound statements you make here. I feel the same way - how can I not be satisifed when I have everything I need? Some deep thoughts went into writing this. Well done,
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I should think someday we will sell tickets to this show!! Don't let people make you feel this, it is not right. The thing I have learned is that too much of this life, others control how we see ourselves.. It's bogus, and you have a great start with this write, keep on that train, because it is going somewhere!!
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rocking~~~
what a totally awesome piece of art you have produced here, it truely rocks, it really spelling out the word power to me.
Thanks for sharing! Ennovy -
A very beautifully written poem. I think you did an outstanding job on this one. It is well worthy of applause!
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lovely
That's the funny thing about life, you're never satisfied. You're always left wanting, needing something more. I think this is absolutly beautiful. You did a fantastic job, thanks for sharing.
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Wow, that was beautiful
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Some wonderful insights to life you have written in these lines. How come for sure. One must question other's motives for doing something or for having them do something - as you do in this verse. Well written. Enjoyed the read.
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you dont settle for less the lord wants you to be a bright and morning star you go for it and be the best you can be---kirby
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in this i can feel the vicums broken sole. -
I liked this, I think you did very good on this one. keep it up! ^__^
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beautiful
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awesome just awesome!! wow loved this piece very nicely written!! keep up the great work! you're very good!
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Wow, this is very very good! I LOVE your use of words and everything about this--it's very powerful. One suggestion I have is instead of "How can you brighten the chambers of my souls that aren't lit," perhaps, "How can you brighten my soul's chambers that aren't lit" But either way, it's a great write and I hope you're proud of it.
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OUch "How can you promise me forever,
When you know not of what tomorrow brings?
How can you say "I'll never,"
When the pain of this broken heart still stings?"
I can feel the burn of venom in the begining of this piece.
Wonderful write.
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The heart speaks volumes in this write, my friend! An awesome piece of poetry this is! The feelings and emotions are tangible! Loved this! Very well done!
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